silently screaming
haunting voices
the black will
show it all
Author notes
prompt: exactly 10 words to describe an emotion
depression
A contest entry
- WORD ECONOMY CHALLENGE! Ten-Word Poems... by TooRainbow.
675 points, ended September 23, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
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mmmm good job! Emotion not neccesarily CLEAR clear... is it anger, hatred, despair... wrath? Stop me if I'm wrong... oh, right. I'll just stop here then
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perhaps next time i will read the author's notes first, lmao. Still, loved the strong poem
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Great last lines. I suffer from depression as well and I believe you captured the feeling in your words. Great job.
Carrie
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the black will show it all
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I liked this a lot. It's extremely short, but gives a big impact and leaves you guessing and almost wanting more. Great job and good luck in the contest
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Interesting take!
You have really personalized this. It's interesting that you use such strong words to describe depression. I have always thought of it as more of a passive emotion, sort of feeling misused or unappreciated and lying around taking it. You show us what depression is like for you. "silently screaming / haunting voices": demonstrates that you feel more than misused; you are truly victimized. The experience for you is razor sharp and burning. "The black will / show it all": lends a sense of the spiralling, dark loss of the ability to function, possibly a wish to cease the endurance of it and end the miserable life that accompanies the feeling. Your depiction is unique and insightful. It's also very candid. Thank you very much for this intriguing work!
Sheryl
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i loved it
i sounded like someone has voices talking to them.......and they really dont want the voices.maybe they think they are going crazy or something....maybe its not that but thats what it sounds like to me good write
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Excellent
Definitley discribes the emotion of depression, you did a excellent job. I wish you the best in this contest!! The first and last lines are so perfect and everything inbetween!! stavykm
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well done here. great fill of emotion.
thanks for sharing best of luck to you.
tory
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