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The Well

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The Well

A flowing river fed the well
Before you left and said “farewell”
But now you’re gone and it is dry
I often ask and wonder why

Now just a hole, an empty shell
A flowing river fed the well
The river of love that had no end
Liquid of life that we would spend

I loved you so there was no doubt
The well dried up and left this drought
A flowing river fed the well
It kept me here, within your spell

The river’s gone, the well dried up
You left me with an empty cup
There’s no one left that I can tell
A flowing river fed the well

 

 

Author notes

Quatern

A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains.
It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain.
The first line of stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza four. A quatern has eight syllables per line.
It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme
scheme.
S1 refrain is L1
S2 refrain is L2
S3 refrain is L3
S4 refrain is L4

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  • tomisb
    September 23, 2007

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    Normally, I find this form so inadequately handled that it is painful to read. This flowed well, almost sang, the imagery was striking and coherent throughout. I was entranced by the feelings and memories that were touched and aroused by this piece. I had to go back and study how you did it. Rarely does technique so genuinely add so nice to the flavor of the piece. Thank you for the treat.
    Love, Tom B.


    • Amera gold member
      September 23, 2007
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      What a beautiful comment; thank you very much.


  • micol
    September 23, 2007

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    The poem circles ceaselessly through its repetition, as a well should. Language fluid and smooth; images coherent, unified; form appropriate to theme and treatment. Well handled throughout.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 16, 2007

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    Another well versed piece teach!
    Thanks for sharing such great flows and forms..

    Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • Cup-a-Joe
    September 16, 2007

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    Photo & Poem fits likes a hand & glove. Wish I could say something French to fit, but I just know hillbill.lol
    Joe


  • Princess Luna
    September 16, 2007

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    I Loved this one!!! It made me want to cry more, but for some reason it made me feel a strange relief as well. I love the connection with love and the well. It fit so perfectly. Like a nightmare come true yet in a peaceful way. The title draw me to this piece, simple and clean. I'd say what my favorite stanza is but the poem seems most effective and emotional with kept together. Like instead of you making it little by little you made it as a whole. A very beautiful piece!


  • vjlvenus
    September 16, 2007
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    i love this poem. it's so beautifully written! Good luck in the contest =]

  • Virgoan
    September 16, 2007

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    A well written piece dripping with pain and sadness. As always, a worth reading piece from you my friend.

    Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest.

    VIRGOAN


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 16, 2007
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    Amera,
    nicely done cubbie....
    the drought of emotions is the absolute worst drought of all, dessication of the soul and the spirit as hope lies cracked and baked like the eviscerated mud of lost desire.



    Dad


  • Hetha gold member
    September 16, 2007

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    The well may have dried up, but your flowing words have become the water that supplies it. This is sad, powerful and beautiful, all at once. Gorgeous!


  • second-born
    September 16, 2007

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    wow...such a sad poem and I liked the imagery and metaphor that you've used...I also liked the natural flow of your poem...you are really the best!!!


  • captain howdy
    September 16, 2007
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    Oh! I love it, love it, love it!!! Always wonderful writing from you!


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 15, 2007
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    god, i love your poetry...sigh

    Lane


  • HaleyMary
    September 15, 2007

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    Beautiful write. Wonderful form and flow. This poem seemed sad, kind of had a sense of heartbreak in it. The well in this piece seemed to symbolize love and how it can form over time, but also could possibly fall apart, too. Good luck in the contest.


  • PerVirtuous
    September 15, 2007

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    The language has a simplicity about it that speaks of innocence. It is both sad and powerful. I like it. I give it...


    Three bunnies.


  • Desire gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    Magnificent!!

    Another Magnificent piece You have penned and Love the rhyme also I wanted to hear more..
    More I tell You

    Beautiful form Sweet One!!
    Gotta take a picture of it

    Thank You for sharing this one!!
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo

    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Tam
    September 15, 2007

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    Wow...

    well done lady!
    I must say in the writing category your cup runneth over...
    such a beautiful form of poetry as well!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    Amera.

    very well done as always, and now I realized why you and I get along so well, we are both deep romantics at heart, very deep. Interesting, guess I should have realized that before, but apparently not??



    dad


  • StarEyes
    September 15, 2007

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    And another wonderful piece you have written here my friend!!!!! I have no idea how you do it, but it is amazing!!!! This one says a lot to me my friend!! What a great job you did!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!

    and much love

    Nyetta

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