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The Gunslinger

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We drove
40 miles into the desert
a book of poems on my lap
where the great themes of life hit me squarely
          the impossibilities of love
                the inevitability of death
as I live with a certain unvarying awareness
of the breach
linking the small power of my own passion
and the devastating realities of the universe –
birth, death, creation, eternity, the gods
a validation of faith
amid the emotions of love and wonder

He tried
To build a bridge
between the prosaic deadness
of the human heart
and that which is inexpressible -
the privileging of the broken
the open
and the vulnerability of the unfinished -
a hole in his skull
that he whistles through
and points like a finger towards heaven
    There is too much to know
          Too much to want...


His skull becomes more than just a skull –
more than just a roof
it becomes a moving, breathing player
in an expansive natural order -
the holey bones become a cloud formation
an easer of storms
of the salt breath that inveigles the sea’s oxygen
so that which is devoutly to be desired
is not the closure of constant cloudpour
(far less a steady streaming of sunlight)
but a time without end
of sticking together
and breaking up -
that will breathe the storm

                               into and out of 
                             

                                       his always open bones






 

 




The Gunslinger
©crisstiena

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  • jo-el
    September 20, 2007

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    you don't understand how pleased i am that a work of my hands(humble as it is) could prompt and work to inspire a write such as this. you looked and saw what i would have never imagined and penned it so it seems as if your ink has splashed every great theme worth writin about under the sky in fairly few lines. the change in perspective from we to he is intriguing and i would definitely love to discuss this with you. the second stanza placed me firmly in awe. not sure exactly what it means but it brought a variety of mind stretchin visions and speculations...worded wonderfully: prosaic deadness
    of the human heart
    and that which is inexpressible -
    the privileging of the broken
    the open
    and the vulnerability of the unfinished -
    a hole in his skull
    that he whistles through
    and points like a finger towards heaven. i felt like whistlin after readin this. it seems to be some sort of supernatural business goin on and i like that. again the words you aligned pleased me. a note worthy entry to say the least. thank you


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    Oh how I like this. Such a metaphor the title is in comparison to the poem. Youir words poured on me, and left me feeling...poetic. Wonderful write from a beautiful soul. Brava!!!

    Blessed be,
    Billie Jean