Planes with Satans words written all over them
with screaming people in the buildings
sirens from miles away come rushing to the falling towers
but when people go in and never come out
familes being hurt for the lost of thier relitives
people dying left and right
wondering why God could let Satan do such a thing
crashing down faster and faster with fire coming out each of the sides
big black smoke smothering people till they die
now in Iraq with millons of troops
serving thier country for world peace
about a 100 die a day
with bombs, guns and fire but only few make it out
trying to hold back the tears when they get that call
still fighting after 6 years
the big question is will we ever end this war
A contest entry
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800 points, ended September 26, 2007, 11 entries
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will we ever end this war
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I wouldn't go blaming anyone but humanity for this tragedy. But I guess that is only my opinion on that. It is a shame what this world is coming to now a days. It's funny how religion is used to take blame off of our selves (not saying you are trying to do this, just a thought). Nice write.
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it seem to me you have a well religous based opinion on this topic and i respect that it was very well captured in the way you worded i
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Intense
I don't understand war; never have and never will
You wrote this with great passion...thank you for sharing and for being a part of this contest -
very passionate i like this thank you so much
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great write
I really liked the piece it made me feel as if I lived the nightmare myself. keep up the great work.
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Heartfelt and passionate. You focus on your topic well, then apply appropriate imagery to make the ideas come through.
If I may make a suggestion: the poem would have been much stronger with more careful proofreading. Your topic suggests that you have a wide audience in mind, all of those/us touched by the events of 911 and since. In that case, care in spelling would go far toward convincing that audience you deserve to be heard, that your ideas are worth considering. Poetry isn't ABOUT spelling; but spelling can become a hindrance to understanding and enjoying poetry.
Thanks for the work you put into this piece, and for entering. Hope to hear from you in another contest.
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