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Depression

Dear friend,
we part.
Take the knife,
scar my heart.



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  • TooRainbow silver member
    September 18, 2007

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    Powerful!

    As you begin, I thought you were shooting for melancholy: "Dear friend, we part.", but your next two lines surge with brutality: "Take the knife, scar my heart." Such courage! I get a sense of dark eagerness to bear the sweet pain as a tribute or rememberance. Definitely depression. Nice job relaying this emotion. I can feel the yearning, the pain, the clinging to the agony. Very well done! Thank you for entering this!
    Sheryl


  • skull8686
    September 16, 2007

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    WHOA!!!! "fallensnow4" you have a side that we don't see and only i'm interested in (i say that because im the only one interested in poetry other than you and Andi!)i think this is great work, just plz don't scar MY heart.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    betrayal perhaps.
    this was the impression i received.
    well done here. has me wondering.,
    best of luck to you
    tory