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A Fisherman's Nightmare

So silent his need for freedom;
As night engulfs the shore,
The darkened sky surely cannot--
harbor the storm;

He finds his life in perile;
Truly a nightmare this will be,
As the sea becomes his enemy;
Life takes on new meaning.

He steers his ship with driving force;
The waves roll in one by one.
Blinded by the lightning;
Smacked by rain.

It seems like hours that he's been fighting,
This monster of the sea;
Demon with glowing eyes--trying to sink him;
Devious twinkle in the sky.

Lo and behold, he sees the faint glimmer of hope
As he steers his ship frantically;
The lighthouse on the distant shore;
Lighting his way home.

Oh no! The light went out!
He cannot find his way;
It seems all is lost--the demon won
But then he sees it again.

The mystical light like angelic hands;
Guiding the way for him;
Oh what a glorious end!
Demon has been struck again!

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  • Endeavor gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    Very good


    The mystical light like angelic hands;
    Guiding the way for him;
    Oh what a glorious end!
    Demon has been struck again!

    Wonderfull end for this well crafted story

    Love it all


  • Fearylynn
    September 15, 2007

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    This definitely has a more classic feel to it. If I didn't know it was an original, I would honestly place it somewhere in the 19th century.

    That's a very good thing.

    I love it!

    • Starry-Eyed Surprise
      September 15, 2007
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      Omg Villy! Thank you sooooooooo much for that wonderful comment you left. It made me feel so good to hear that I compare to 19th century poets! I am honored.

      • Fearylynn
        September 15, 2007
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        well, it was deserved. Obviously, since its in modern vernacular it loses a bit of that 19th century appeal, but the flow and form are incredibly comparable. I think its just a really great blend of past and present.


  • Princess-nee
    September 15, 2007

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    It would be a real nightmare for a fisherman if the light goes off in a stormy night like when a demon appears.Frightning thing to be out there fishing lol.Good poem focusing on a different subject.

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