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Love

Chanting beat
reverberates in throat
unable to cough
meaningful communication.

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for My white raven


propmt: in 10 word discribe a one word emotion, I choose love

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  • Anna Kay
    September 17, 2007

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    Like TooRainbow, I love the last line...feels a bit like there is more underneath than meets the eye at first. Strange how love can grip us on occasion...and strange how hearts can beat in places where they definitely don't belong

  • TooRainbow silver member
    September 16, 2007

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    Very nice!

    You must be very much in love with one named white raven! Your "a love so intense it chokes you" metaphor brings a powerful emotional response from your reader. I particularly enjoyed your last line: "meaningful communication"! What would true love be without it? Nicely done!! Good luck and thank you for entering!
    Sheryl


  • crimsondew
    September 15, 2007
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    Like this..well described, you had me thinking for a moment...
    All the best!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 15, 2007

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    well done here poet. Alot expressed in such few lines. bravo to you and best of luck my friend.
    Bravo.
    Tory


  • Lady Eventide
    September 15, 2007

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    I thought we weren't supposed to put the title in until the author comments???

    Oh, well, I guess you sort of gave yours away. I didn't have to guess at all. Great read, though. Really beautiful.

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