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Freedom's Form



Frankly fighting ferociously for freedom's form
Tortured, tormented, and torn
Hardly had helped, held, or hoped
To transmit types or times
Of methods, meanings, and most meanderings
In ways, words, will, wonders, and wanderings
Stay still so stated statements
Until an answer actually appears

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  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    May 25

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    Excellent

    The USA will over come the present conflict both over seas and on our own soil. We survived the Great Depression and we will survive this one.


    • Andy Stephenson
      May 26
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      Hi Neve!

      I'm very glad you like this poem. You have an interesting take on it.

      I had been mostly playing with alliterations in this poem. I tried for some cohesion, but I didn't think there was as much depth as you've found in it.

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      My more active friends: penman, Sea angel, Sylvyrwyng, abuyi, Delaney, Lavender Butterfly, ScarletO, and suseann. I recommend them to you.

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      Andy


  • Rajaram
    January 19

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    The word flow is wonderful. Ideas very coherent and stunningly well structured poem dear. What a great piece of work. A poem intrinsically designed to express the link between art and freedom. Keep penning such wonders. I would appreciate, if you could spare some time to stamp your impressions on my poems.

    • Andy Stephenson
      January 20
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      Thanks

      Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm very glad you like this poem.

      I spend most of my online time at Storywrite, now.

      Andy


  • condor gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Love the compacting of all these words. Not quite sure what you meant by it, but when i read it i see a lonely swagman just moving around, a little embittered and hope in his heart that someone may notice him. I can see him with his swag on his shoulder silently walking the quiet streets....waiting. A great write with an opening for interpretations. Top stuff, Andy.

    • Andy Stephenson
      October 17, 2008
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      Hi Condor

      This is mostly alliterations and play on words. I'm not really sure there is much actual meaning, but it was fun to write.

      Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause.

      Andy


  • Ellis gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Hey, Yes

    Time heals clock wheels
    That croak because they're broke
    For meals caught on fishing reels
    Missing the boat will get your goat


  • LoveIsALosingGame
    March 6, 2008

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    great job!

    the structure is great because it makes it intense especially when coupled with your lists eg "tortured, tormented and torn". Very thought provoking indeed.

    Claire

    • Andy Stephenson
      March 6, 2008
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      Thanks

      This poem sounds great, but I'm not actually certain what it means. I'm glad that you like it. I like it, too. It was an entry to an alliteration contest.

      Andy


  • Annastacia
    November 7, 2007

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    Hmmm, I love the word play here, but I had to read a couple of times to get past it. Still a little lost but I like it!
    Anna

    • Andy Stephenson
      November 7, 2007
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      Thanks

      It is kind of a fun poem, but I can't claim that it makes great sense. I'm a little lost myself as to what it really means, if anything.

      Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. I'm glad you like this poem.

      Andy

  • Bob Fox
    October 24, 2007
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    The means

    I read your words & honestly I am open to thought. Is history a blemish that is to be smooth over?

    • Andy Stephenson
      October 25, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding this poem. I appreciate it. I hope that you like it. I would say that history is often smoothed over, and also current events.

      Andy


  • abuyi
    October 22, 2007

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    Until an answer actually appears

    Frankly fighting ferociously for freedom's form
    Tortured, tormented, and torn
    Hardly had helped, held, or hoped
    To transmit types or times
    Of methods, meanings, and most meanderings
    In ways, words, will, wonders, and wanderings
    Stay still so stated statements
    Until an answer actually appears

    its strong and beautifully done andy.. well i missed reading ur writes, they are always different and suprising to me..
    ur friend
    abuyi

    • Andy Stephenson
      October 22, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks for stopping by, reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I spend most of my time at Storywrite now. I haven't been writing much poetry or songs. I haven't written a lot of stories in the last three weeks. Good to hear from you.

      Andy


  • Nikkisixxx
    October 8, 2007
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    Wow the alliteration was really powerful, and not try-hard. Great poetry!

    • Andy Stephenson
      October 9, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. This was a fun poem to write. I am glad that you liked reading it.

      Andy


  • LezzieC76
    September 30, 2007

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    The alliteration is amazing. That is something I have struggled with, so to see someone write it so seemingly effortless is stunning! I love the message and the emotion it evokes! Fantastic write!

    • Andy Stephenson
      October 1, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm very pleased that you like this poem. It was rather fun to write, but I'm not certain it made much sense in the end.

      Andy


  • John Carney
    September 28, 2007

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    I really liked the alliteration in this poem. It really effectively showcases the poem's theme and makes it more profound in form and meaning.

    John Carney

    • Andy Stephenson
      September 28, 2007
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      Thanks John

      Thanks for reading, commenting and all the applause. I appreciate it. This poem went pretty well till the end, and then I had a bit of trouble making it unify the way I wanted. The alliteration was fun.

      Andy


  • requiempoet gold member
    September 27, 2007
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    Hey that's clever!! wonderful job Andy. I miss you kiddo!

    • Andy Stephenson
      September 27, 2007
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      Thanks Rosita

      Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. How are you today? IM me, I'm going over to storywrite and I'll get the IM while I'm there.

      Andy

  • celadia
    September 19, 2007
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    Interesting

    A really good poem and very interesting use of language.

    • Andy Stephenson
      September 19, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. I'm glad you like this poem. It's the first in a while that I have written.

      Andy


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    September 15, 2007

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    once again my friend you have done something amazing, i liked this poem and just the whole idea behind it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


    • Andy Stephenson
      September 15, 2007
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      Thanks Aaron

      I appreciate you for reading and commenting. I'm glad that you like this poem.

      Andy

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