Sampson's lookin' up at me,
sharp tabbie eyes a-yearnin' for something.
Scratch his chin and he glows,
mews "thank you" under his breath.
Turns once, precisely,
leans his head against me.
Grins ever so slightly.
Reach for a match, light a cigar,
and scratch that spot
right behind his ear.
Author notes
For Sampson
A contest entry
- Animal Friends by Himitsu.
550 points, ended May 30, 24 entries
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Cats do seem to get such satisfaction and contentment from mere petting. I suppose they enjoy the simple things in life. Getting to know their preferences over time makes that unspoken connection all the more powerful. Thank you for your entry.
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Kitty cat... it makes me think of my cat Sassaphras... she was all burnt orange and brown with black in between and her eyes all twixt with mingling colors of the days sun and grass she was so fond of... and her paws all sticky from pine sap from playing in the shorter pines out back, she was like a little cougar that one, ferocious yet tame and beutiful when wild and dancin with her paws in the air... Ahh little kitty had to go though...
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Nice
I like this i love cats and dogs. cats ove for you to pat them. sometimes they act almost human as do dogs. -
Captures the essence. Great control of colloquial tone, appropriate to theme and content. "Cuss" and "yearnin'" let us know immediately who is speaking, what to expect of the poem. "Precisely" balances the colloquial tone with a moment of ... well, precision that raises the poem beyond simple nostalgia and assures us that the poem has been well considered. Nicely done.
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ha. brillant
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nothing like the company of a kitty! the simplicity of this clarifies such a simple mood. thank you - made me smile!
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Cute.
My first impression is this is short and cute and funny.Emotionally I can picture that cat rubbing around your legs begging to be fed. This is not awkward and needs no changes. I liked the first two lines the best. The title is perfect and the first line is the best way to start. the last line is the right way to end this. I thought it was cute. -
Descriptive
With its descriptive words and its short length, this piece evokes a very simple emotion (in a good way). I like the very relaxed and happy nature of this piece. Good job!
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mews "thank you" under his breath.
Turns once, precisely,
leans his head against me.
awww dude, yeah this ones great, got that old time feeling of it, alike cats would never really arrive or leave anywhere they just simply are there... something to do with being in nine dimensions at once... they would also be great guardians against the ghosts and negative karmic influences... well as long as you feed them enough
anyheys thanks for sharing this w coffee and malt biscuits -JAS 
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I like it
So simple, yet it tells much about the friendship between you and Sampson. I liked the "Sampson's lookin' up at me,
sharp tabbie eyes a-yearnin' for something." part the most. And the "turns once, precisely" shows that you do know how your buddy acts when he wants something I just got my own kitten, named him Wolf, as my dogs name is Bear. It's always interesting to see what ways an animal can grow up to act.
In short, I love this poem.
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I like your poem, but I haven't posted the prompt yet. I'm not sure this will be appropriate but it is your call.
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