My heart, my soul
my love, my dreams
my blood
You stole my heart,
tore it to pieces
watched as I fell from grace
did nothing as my soul screamed
cried out in pain, in anger
listened as a soul died
I watched you take my love for granted
give your own away to another
felt your ignorance tear me more
you watched me desperately grasp onto faded dreams
lose hope when I had nothing left
looked upon my body as it too died with everything else I had
You took everything
my heart, my soul
my love and my dreams
but to you I give my blood
the crimson rivers that flow from my veins
the flood of everything you gave to me
everything I never wanted
I bleed for you.
Author notes
Option Three
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I loved how the beginning came back at the end. It seemed to tie the whole thing together. It's a very emotional piece and something that many can relate to even if they didn't physically bleed. Thanks for your entry and good luck!
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Nicely penned
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A classic bleeding heart write. Thank you for entering.
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wow, twisted ending, i really like that, (i'm glad you already told me your not suicidal) I also really loved how your beggining and end were related, way to tie the poem together. I don't know how you mannage such wonderful imagery, but it is truly fantastic. I can almost see myself in her place, and...given your ending that doesn't sound like the best place to be. Great write!
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I agree. it is very emotional. All so familiar too. Its something that happens to alot of people so alot of people can relate to this. It made me feel teary.
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This is so very sad. Deeply emotional about a woman who has given everything - even all of her life - to have it thrown back in her face. Wonderful and deeply sad piece.
You keep writing
All the best
Wayne
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