Fragile
This heart of mine
Lost, Broken, Hurt, and Maimed
Doomed henceforth to relive the pain
Of the acidic words inflicted there
Shards of emotion that cut out
The pain you caused my soul
Forever more
Fragile
Author notes
This was the pic I used for my prompt. I also did my poem in Rictamer form, since it was suggested by a dear friend that I enter that way.
http://www.marsneedsguitars.com/blog_pics/broken-heart-2.jpg
A contest entry
- +++Be Inspired With Imagery+++ [[options contest]] by PerfectImperfection.
900 points, ended September 24, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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How is it that I missed these poems of yours??? This was absolutely beautiful and heartbreaking. I loved it.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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rictameter eh? It looks really fun! I don't know if I could manage one as good as yours, though! Congrats on your HM
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love it
love it! i love form poetry, i find it so addicting i have taken a bit of a break from it lol. you did this so well!!!
"shards of emotion that cut out"
that is the line that makes it go so perfectly with the pic for me
AWESOME work thanks for sharing!
Tasha
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Perfect!
You are getting really good with this form.
I enjoyed it much, friend.
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very good
i like it
shows the sensitivity of emotional abuse
a cruel, callous conniver with negative comments
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awwww honey this one was sad but i liked it. You did a good job on it.
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Perfect form! It is so nice to say that after the many form newbies that just didn't quite 'get it'! So no icky from the peanut gallery. Very well spoken lines! Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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