Take my hand and
Become my bride.
I'm down on one knee,
Waiting for you to decide.
My heart is racing
As your lips start to move.
Tears roll down your cheeks,
As your words approve.
In one motion,
I sweep you off your feet.
Our tears flow in eachother's arms;
Our hearts at one constant beat.
Kissing eachother repeatedly,
Unable to stop.
I'll hold you suspended in the
Air forever, never letting you drop.
In eachother's arms we live,
As the years become our pasts.
Still in eachother's arms as
We breathe our last.
Never before us has Love
Shown its true definition.
Together we rewrote history,
Love never knew true ambition.
In Love's pages behold the
Story of Theresa and Chris,
Even in Death they live together
In eternal bliss.
Author notes
Theresa this is to you, and to our love; as always. I'll more than love you forever and a day, and together we will rewrite history. If you are an outside reader and want to know the significance of my mispelling the word each other, combining it to one. It's because it's a metaphorical reference to Theresa and I. Why have two seperate words/lives when we can make one?
-Chris aka Silvos.
A contest entry
- Anything and Everything by californiagirl.
300 points, ended September 20, 2007, 31 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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UR ARE ARE AMAZING WITH YOUR WORDS!!!!
and a very sweet romantic with your future wife!
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The emotion the welled up inside me as I read this was undescribable. The author's notes were a bonus to read and I thank you for the clarification of the word. You obviously have a great deal of love that will never die for her. I truly thank you for your entry.
Love and luck in all you endeavor.
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beautiful
theresa is so lucky she has you...this is another great poem inspired by her...i love it!!!great job!!!
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Wow your so good with words
Theresa is so lucky! I just cannot stop thinking that15 and 16 sounded awkward. I think you should put the word air on 15 and cut it out of 16 or change it to
"I'll hold you suspended
Never letting you drop.
in the air forever."
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oh this is every womans dream to be loved like this
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And Theresa happens to be my dream girl, I will forever love her constantly.
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Omg! You just gave me goosebumps. It is really a great write.
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You guys have a beatuiful love. You make it sound.... story like. Best Wishes!
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this is just lovely so open and unguarded well done!
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boy am i glad that she sent this link to this piece as it is very hot I have not written much do to my schedule so you dont have to return the favor but i am a essence lady and i was pleasured to read a essnce guy piece this was to beautiful for eye sight
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With this title I am expecting some burning love You go beyond words into the space where two are now one in essence You show the strength of the love you share because you want it past forever and that day is just so very special a week is better to have more blend forever in spirit as one being one soul permanently. you may have won gold but i think you won a lot more than that in life.
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This is just beautiful
and something I needed to read today.
Well worth the gold.
~sugar~
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Silvos
this is absolutely Beautiful. I can hear the words softly spoken and reaps of Love pouring from you heart into he sea of acceptance. You have penned this well and Deserved the GOLD, by all means.
It's a pleasure to read such wonderful talent.
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Very open and heartwarming, which is something that isn't always easy to do in a love piece.
Good write and congrats on gold.
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Such a beautifully written poem you have penned here.
A truly deserving piece for the gold. Well done and thanks a lot for sharing this one here. Keep up the wonderful work!
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Excellent poem my friend. You have most definitely found you muse in Theresa. She has captivated you to write, and to write often about her and your relationship. I look forward to reading more in the future.
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This is beautiful. I loved it. You are so lucky to have found someone you love so much. I was swept into it at the beginning with the proposal and it just didn't let go. Thank you so much for your entry!
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This is beautiful... as always... I would love to have the love you and Theresa have... I had it and I let it slip right through my fingers... Koodles
Blessed be
Mystic
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most love poems are mostly the same in every way. but you always seem to write them with such difference and an extra little oomph to them... the sam e has to be said for his one. i'd have to say it is one of the best love poems i have ever read!
~lostelvenchild <--- do you ever read this part?
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By far my favorite you have written on this website, and I can only imagine how much this poem means to you and Theresa. It must bear so much sentimental value... It's the best non-fictional love story in poetry format I have ever read. Very good write, you have found what every couple wishes they could find. Im just waiting till I find my Theresa.
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Ohhhh! You are so cute! I love reading your romantic little pieces! You're girl should realize how special and lucky she is! Because I sure do!
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Aaaaahhh.....If true love exists, I believe this is how it should feel. Two separate entities unable to live without eachother blending together in one union. A beautiful poem.
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Nice
I liked the flow of the piece, there was no weak point in it. And the attitude of the poem was positive and made me feel like I was looking in at two special people.
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