Deep within my passion flares
as sparks of fire ignite
at your imminent touch.
Transfixed, I am lured
spiralling into the essence of you,
absorbed within your liquid depths.
Epiphany radiates throughout my spirit,
you behold my inner core
and I am stamped for eternity.
Alone no more, we are united.
Author notes
Prompt:: You take the world out of my eyes
- Zeromancer
A contest entry
- Quickie... again by Exodus.
300 points, ended September 14, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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There is no one part of these lines to highlight because the whole is perfect. I loved every word.
Congratulations on your bronze Gaylene
Take care
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oh wow gran this was an amazing take on the prompt and was just so deep and emotional
it was beautifully written
congrats on the bronze
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Oy!!
Magnificent take on the prompt busy one
Congratulations on Your trophy win
Love this
Transfixed, I am lured
spiralling into the essence of you,
absorbed within your liquid depths.
Wooooo Hooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes to You!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful work, and a great take on the prompt. I loved the flow of this, it is effortless to read, while still making you think about the words. Thank you
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'I am stamped for eternity' -- love the power in that phrase.
Hmmm, maybe it's just me but the first stanza isn't making much sense. Perhaps it's that 'you' could be 'your'.
Beautiful images all the same. Luck for the contest.
DancingRed.
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gotta love this with all the right emotions to take it to another world love the last line best of luck in this contest
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