apple trees grew in spindly reminders
like calligraphic curls bent
into the backs of garden chairs
propped against cemetery walls.
winter’s wiccan stole ripe colour
from the depth of the world’s soul;
the seasons’ witch-nailed fingers
reached with biting breeze
to pluck the heart-shaped fruit
which had hung itself in fated repose.
Author notes
winter steals the apple of my eye.
xx
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A contest entry
- Quickie... again by Friday.
300 points, ended September 14, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie Quest ~ Prewrite Party 2 by Namita.
300 points, ended October 6, 2007, 95 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite me! ~~ One day only ~~ 500 points to Gold, will be judged tomorrow. by Naridill.
625 points, ended September 28, 2007, 145 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
critique welcome.
Comments
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A well deserve win! I love the imagery of this so much.
Congratulations!
Thanks for sharing and keep writing my friend.
VIRGOAN
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Definately a piece I would suggest adding to, the phrasing is brilliant but seems like so much more could be added. Simply beautiful.
Much luck -
wonderful imagery.....
I remember those apple tree fingers from my childhood on the farm......your words made me shiver with the winter cold and crisp.....very nice.....ttfn Laurel
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I've commented before.
So I'm not commmenting Hannah.
Luv,
~Candy
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Just adore the imagery in this. Excellent write and congrats on the gold!
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The whole first stanza encompasses my favorite lines of this poem.
Actually, I change my mind. My favorite part is "the seasons’ witch-nailed fingers".
Also, I love the title.
I'm so happy you got gold trophy on this! You definately deserve it.
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Wow... this was great!! I loved the lines:
"winter’s wiccan stole ripe colour
from the depth of the world’s soul"
Awesome write!!
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Wowww! Love the prompt, love the poem better. Wonderful Hannah! Great job and congrats on the goldie!
Candy
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congrats
congrats on the Gold, very good job.
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Beautiful from beginning to end, and a fantastic take on the prompt. Certainly different from anything else I have read so far. Thank you
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Prompt:: You take the world out of my eyes
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