Twisting pixies
into tide knot portholes
causes more damage than damage can be
done
Ensuing revisions of mist and sand in my teeth –
stenciling every piece of me into spaces
I eventually will become
My skin quivers
with the heat of your bed
my carnal smile
languishing among your sheets
and your thighs cherish
my burning face
only because
I have whispered your name
The knob quietly unlatches itself from
framelessness – colors that once
covered every containment wall in here
have found new homes on
gentler skins spread out across
this lying place – fans on high
On both sides of you naked
your mouth
capable of anything
the clash
of putting two things together
any two, any time
I want her to show me all her tattoos
me – on a kissing tour between them all
she – laughing when I stop at perfect
spots along the way
we – succumbing to this kind of mapping
only makes us want to travel more
Please
let me come to you bare
among
the erotic stars of the heavens
and we’ll open the forbidden doors
of our desire...
Tide Knot Portholes
crisstiena/Balldinger
A contest entry
- Total Seduction: Mind and Body (18 and over ONLY) by Celticmoon.
600 points, ended October 15, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is brilliant work and deserving of at least the silver trophy. I love the imagery, the references to mapping a path and the overall tone of this piece. Excellent work and good luck in the contest.
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such a great collaboration from the two of you. i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. hope2makeit
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a very good write from you here. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future and i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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magical
very magical and intelligent,interesting all the way through...i like crisstienas style -
"My skin quivers
with the heat of your bed
my carnal smile
languishing among your sheets
and your thighs cherish
my burning face
only because
I have whispered your name"
A perfect pairing of wild, wondrous words, my Friends. Good luck in Bel's contest. So sensual, sublime & serene. 
Wanda
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aah, this was lovely! I loved it! I really don't know how to explain how this affected me... it was like... it just left me in awe... you did a wonderful job writing it! good luck in the contest! good work! keep it up!!!
Crimson -
excellent. many lines that i found gratifying: my carnal smile
languishing among your sheets
and your thighs cherish
my burning face
only because
I have whispered your name ;The knob quietly unlatches itself from
framelessness – colors that once
covered every containment wall in here
have found new homes on
gentler skins spread out across
this lying place – fans on high ; I want her to show me all her tattoos
me – on a kissing tour between them all
she – laughing when I stop at perfect
spots along the way
we – succumbing to this kind of mapping
only makes us want to travel more
i realize that i basically have just highlighted pretty much the whole poem...anyway. very intrigueing and cleverly sensual write
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that kissing tour does sound HOT.
this is a spendid piece of writing, from the tips of two very creative, and innovative writers. last two stanzas are wonderful.
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Very hot poem. Keep up the great work, it was a real pleasure to read, I liked it all.
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