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Momiji

fires burn
carnelian and amber
winds lick
swirling vortices
char black
naked skeletons

eagerly embrace
conflagration

for after every pyre
falls
silent
ash

A contest entry

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  • AJ Morelli gold member
    September 24, 2007
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    thanks so much for entering the contest, i really appreciate it...


    al


  • Cat gold member
    September 18, 2007

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    i like the first stanza very much and the final- i am not sure the middle stanza works- a simpler phrase there
    could have lent a more poetic voice to the piece-
    but that said i think you did a fine job with this piece and im glad to see you in this contest

    m