Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

The Changed Prince

Once upon a time,
in a far away land,
a prince was about to ask a maiden,
for her hand.
All of a sudden,
in a whirl of smoke,
a frog took his place,
he began to croak.
The frog prince was in inner turmoil,
thinking of how
his beloved maiden
could marry him now.
Distressed,
he lept away,
swimming deep,
from the light of day.
Crying frog tears,
he weeps for the life he never would know,
his love for this girl,
he never could show.
He was sorry
he couldn't have been,
more kind to
friends and kin.
His tiny tears of repentance ran down his frog face,
ran down his cheek,
for once in his life,
he felt strangely meek.
"It was I,"
a voice said,
"That turned you into a frog,
so not on a horrible thing will your mind tread."
"I am very sorry,"
the prince said distraught,
another wrong thing,
I will do naught."
"My dear prince,"
out from behind a fence the old lady appeared,
"I shall turn you back,
unlike what you have feared.
You will still have the same body,
but not the same heart.
You will appreciate others,
and do your own part."
The elderly woman sprinkled a powder,
over the former prince,
he suddenly changed back into his old self
and walked towards the figure near the fence.
"Thank you so much,
for the opportunity to rethink,
my life, my friends, everyone around me
who gets affected by my every blink."
The prince strode along,
for the first time enjoying,
the dainty fragrance of the roses,
for the bouquet he was making.
Softly plucking blooms,
he started rethinking how to propose,
to the girl whom he loves,
and to his love he goes.
After a delightful dinner,
he took her to the garden behind his house,
took the nearby bouquet,
and set it in the hands of his soon-to-be spouse.
He dropped down on one knee,
and pulled out a ring,
his love for this woman,
he started to sing.
His maiden,
with streaming tears,
said "Yes!"
her love for him she volunteers.
Each day for him is a miracle,
with his new bride to cherish,
throughout the land,
his kindness will never perish.

Author notes

This was such a fun piece, I could not stop!
I like rhyming poems best, picture or style prompts the most, and mi nombre es RisingTideofChrist.
I want to be in the rounds contest b/c I am unique, imaginitive...and bored.

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 15 of 15

  • skye01 gold member
    May 16, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    This is really good and I loved the theme.


  • Ale E
    March 12, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I liked this a lot. Very touching indeed. This had fairly good flow as well. Nicely written.

    Thank you for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.

    ale xox


  • warrior-eagle
    January 28, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Awww.
    Hehe.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • Melodies
    January 25, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Today your enchanting poem will be published on Poetry Planet, where hundreds of visitors will smile! Thank you!


  • Systems Malfunction
    January 24, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This was well written. My problem is this whole fairy tale seen is pretty cliche. Your word usage is good and describes it well, but that was my big problem with thoroughly enjoying it. However, it is really well written to say the least about it.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    January 14, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is a great piece thank you for sharing this with me I wish you luck in the contests that you have entered this in much love


  • crimsondew
    January 10, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    What a cute write..I could not stop reading..
    All the best!


  • Lute
    January 8, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    content-7
    vocabulary-8.7
    accuracy-7.3
    creativity-7.2
    theme-7
    originality-7

    totals-45

  • Melodies
    January 7, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Smiling and thinking you did have fun writing this because it was fun reading it. Thank you for bringing it to our fairy tales contest.


  • opaqueangel
    December 27, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    Gtrreat job and good luck in the contest!


  • Lively Matter
    December 15, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    lovely! I love it very much, the imagery of this poem was fantastic including, and a charming tale of change and love indeed, thank you very much for entering and good luck! ^_^


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 10, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    Very nice. You put a lotta hard work in to this Good luck in my contest


  • Eternal-Jammy-Jam
    October 12, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    aww that's nice ...


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    September 26, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    A very well written faery Tale a lot of kids can relate to this and well related to life. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest


  • twinkling of an eye
    September 15, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Awwh! This is a really sweet and heartwarming write. Love how you've incorporated the fairy-tale with the wonderful life lesson. Good work, and good luck in my contest!

1 - 15 of 15