I am lost like a heart between two bodies,
your charm, the discreet illusion of a
live corpse playing with lamenting dismay,
to another's, your heart may be the key.
What makes you, love...to cancel desire?
In a youth where love is a prospects hire.
To be settled behind his face so calm...
Where in another's arms, happiness spawns.
Beneath the road of my crucified flowers,
In my world, my eyes, where you will all sleep,
nibbling on my ears, fairies of my dreams,
nibbling on my obscure root of power.
That night I caught my falling stars of glass,
fermenting rum from an islands rich stash.
Author notes
A [spanish] sonnet in English from a friend describing her discreet [charm].
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OOOH, this is beautiful! So full of imagery and emotion! I think you should include the title as notes, and make a new title, cuz I don't think this is appropriate. Just how I see it . . .
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Encantadora!
Que maravillosa es esta poema! Es una de las mejores que he leido por ti. How do you think of these things? I can't even find the words to describe what I think of it. It is very profound, you cannot just read it, you have to think about it also. There is so much feeling, you get very emotional reading it. This really is amazing. I love the line with "crucified flowers", and the last two lines are just incredible. You even follow a rhyme scheeme. This is great...I'm sorry I can't express more of what I think!
Excellent job, bien hecho! I'm glad you're back.
---Esperanza
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beautiful! simply beautiful work here, the way it enters chaos in the differences of rhyme and meter to english and then rounds itself into pure sculpurilised brilliance upon the ending desire is wonderful to my inner eye.. the idea of the heart on the outside -rhythm, fairies upon the ear -otherworldy communication and catching the stars -the wish, all wonderful in complete thoughts bravo!
w pineapple, banana and mango ice cream
-jas
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