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Specter

I am trying to forget

my memories of you.

 

They only bring heartache

now that you're gone.

 

You're tormenting my dreams,

turning them into nightmares.

 

My fantasies are poisoned

with the image of your face.

 

Your figure lingers

in the deepest recesses

of my mind,

a shadow dementing me

each time I close my eyes.

 

No matter what the cost is,

my masochistic mind clings

to every thought of you.

 

Looking in the mirror,

I see your face

staring back at me.

 

You won't leave me alone,

a painful reminder of what once was.

 

It's torture just to breathe,

it's murder just to see.

 

I cannot escape

from your melancholy specter,

trailing me everywhere I go.

 

Just wanting to forget,

to make the pain subside,

but constantly reminded

of the way things were.

 

Can't you let me be?

I just want to leave

this ache behind.

 

I want to be free of my bitter chains,

no longer wanting to belong to you.

 

Alas,

no matter where I run,

you are sure to follow.

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  • Albrecht Duracell
    September 27, 2007

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    A whole lot of "I"s in this poem

    since we know after the first couple of I's who is talking from what perspective, it should be possible to phase out a few of the explicit I's later in the poem, it makes for more readable fare.


    • Misfortune
      September 27, 2007
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      Thanks for your comment! I have now updated the poem according to your comment. Thank you for the suggestion!

      - Misfortune.