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Faultless

I blame my being of weak

I blame myself for not speaking out

 

It's just the way you look at me

it's just not the same

 

You don't smile to me anymore...

you lied about talking to me before..

 

Told your friends that I only love

the white flying birds in the sky above

 

help me sleep now through the night

help me win my heartbreak fight

 

let me tocuh your vibrant skin

or this poem will be fin

 

Never let me talk to you

never let me see this through

 

you're a wall just in my way

if you won't move I'll take away

 

all the things you ever loved

give you things you pushed and shoved

 

this is how you make me feel

strip my emotions peel by peel

 

make me sob all through the night

I jsut lost my heartbreak fight

 

Will you think of me again

or will you think of someone who and when

 

I always tried to treat you right

never let you out of sight

 

because that's how I love you so

reach the sky or sleep below

 

Guess I won't know how to say

how I wanted things this way

 

Do you love me, yes or no

I really, really want to know

 

Is it my fault or is it yours

maybe I'll buy a razor from gothic stores

 

All I wanted was your embrace

hold your hand and kiss your face

 

 

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  • alwaysapartofme
    June 28, 2008
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    it was good and it flowed pretty well! I liked it!


  • Aurielle
    October 3, 2007
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    I like it. Thought this was very sentiment this is cute


  • Eruvande Almare
    October 1, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Very nice work here, sweet and simple filled with human hurt. One can really sense the pain in this poem, on a slow spiral down into agony. It is such a tradgedy that anyone has to go through rejection or a love turning to another. I definitely know how this feels, hehe. Anyway, I enjoyed reading this! Definitely keep up the excellent work dear poet!

    ~Elizabeth~

  • xTomorrowx
    October 1, 2007

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    i like this... the rhyme is really good, so is the rhythm... the emotions were also great, really well done =)
    thanks for your entry, i'd love another brother, and good luck in my contest =)


  • Dragons Lady
    September 23, 2007

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    It's very good. The rhythm and rhyme were perfectly smooth throughout the write. (my opinion) The emotions are so well expressed that they are easily felt by the reader. Thank you for sharing. Love the background.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 17, 2007

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    WOW.

    So I haven't read any of your poems in awhile. And I'm not sure why. So I'm going to comment this one now :]
    This was absolutely incredibly awesome. And it is good. It definitely DOES NOTTT suck at all.

    "you're a wall just in my way
    if you won't move I'll take away
    all the things you ever loved"

    Wow. Those lines speak so much truth its crazy. I love it! This poem is filled with so much power. I like it a lot =]

    "All I wanted was your embrace
    hold your hand and kiss your face"

    DEFINITELY a perfect way to end this beautiful sad piece. Ahmazing, I'd have to say! Just like all your other poems :] But there was something about this one that just stood out to me. Your words were just breath taking and everything about it was greattt!!
    Thanks for sharing=]
    Loveddd this.


  • XpushXmeXagainX
    September 14, 2007

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    I think my favorite lines are:

    "This is how you make me feel
    Strip my emotions peel by peel"

    and

    "All I wanted was your embrace
    Hold your hand and kiss your face"

    I know what you're going through. You shouldn't have to deal with this pain. >.< You have such amazing talent. This poem almost brought me to tears.

    <3 Nikki

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