Your friendship means the world to me
Stronger than the tide of an ocean
Pulling me to places, further than the eye can see
Wrapped up in bitter sweet emotion
Stronger than the tide of an ocean
Bound by trust, covered in respect
Wrapped up in bitter sweet emotion
So simple how we perfectly connect
Bound by trust, covered in respect
Growing closer over the years
So simple how we perfectly connect
Together overcoming our fears
Growing closer over the years
I am honored to have a friend like you
Together overcoming our fears
Always keeping life fresh and new
I am honored to have a friend like you
Pulling me to places, further than the eye can see
Always keeping life fresh and new
Your friendship means the world to me
A contest entry
- The Pantoum Challenge by Denierim.
2000 points, ended September 30, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Friendship is one of the most important things in the world. A human beings cannot lead a full like without friends is what I believe. I love the way you described friendship in this piece, showing the good sides that still break sometimes to a tougher time. Friendship always winds, but it is a battle.
In negative side, the flow seemed to break at some points. It wasn't all that major, but just something I noticed while reading the piece.
Other than that you did a wonderful job with this!
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This is a very nice write.
Stronger than the tide of an ocean
Bound by trust, covered in respect
Wrapped up in bitter sweet emotion
So simple how we perfectly connect
Thanks for sharing and goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes
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Thank you for your kind words.......greatly appreciated as usual
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