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Lonely Heart

There is an emptiness in my heart,
A temporary darkness that threatens to tear it apart
It's known simply as a craving; lust, and want,
The desire of possessing something that can not be bought.
For years this emptiness has clawed at my heart,
Screaming for attention; for a chance to sparkle in the dark.
I want desperately what others take in vain,
The care; the ache; the very torments of pain.
Better to know love and the joy it can bring
Than to stand apart from the rest-- silent and maim.

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  • Kimojuno
    September 14, 2007

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    2) You must use less then ten lines (EG: No more then nine).

    This is very emotional, however you need to follow the rules better, you also used the word 'love' which is against rule #4.


  • eyesofanangel524
    September 14, 2007

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    Wonderfully written. Great take on the contest. This IS full of emotion. Best of luck to you in the contest.