People are angry and bitter
Depressed, Is, I think the right word.
We’ve nothing left to hold onto,
No hope,
No dreams.
They have been replaced with poverty and war.
A million starving infants,
A million excuses why we shouldn’t change.
“For the People by the People,”
Has been disbanded.
As no one has the motivation to do anything anymore.
Those who are apathetic are the lucky ones
Not having to endure
The rock bottom state of our Nation.
Bloody tears
Produced by bloodshot eyes.
Heroine and Cocaine
Seem like the only escape.
It may be fake, and it may be glass.
But at least it’s something.
A small escape hatch from this fucking mess.
Murder and Rape,
Assault And Burglary.
These things seem unnatural,
Inhuman even.
But they’re just ways of letting it out.
We are to blame for it.
In the 30’s they called it a depression.
But it was so much less.
Now, in the age of
Advancement and prosperity,
We get the first real taste of depression.
Those in Power do nothing to repair the work.
For the feel the same affects as we do.
Lack of Interest.
Angry Embitterment.
Depression is such a cliché word these days,
No one wants to admit it,
For we are all apart of it.
And we’re sinking, sinking, sinking.
Our boat is aimed straight for a iceberg.
But no one has the motivation
To change enough
To stop it.
And so we sink Deeper
Into our cesspool of frailty and
Failure.
Depression leads to low levels of productivity,
And finally to destruction.
Apocalypse redux.
And So it is…
And So it becomes…
And So it will always be…
Author notes
Depression and Grief has torn us apart....
so we aren't really united any more.
A contest entry
- The United States Of Depression by just a voice.
600 points, ended September 25, 2007, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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great write but i have to point out a few errors i noticed. you should have put for they feel the same effects we do.
and a few lines down from that it should be an iceberg.
with that said i love this write. i would like to think there is a shimmering star of hope in our sky, and there still might be one. but i cant see it. poems with this sort of ventilation are sprouting up more more and more. very nice flow in this one and you used very clear and concise words. however depression and grief have torn us apart since the beginning of our kind on this earth, i dont think it will stop us now, for we have never been united and we have endured thousands of years. i do belive however that something is coming that will cleanse the earth again and set us back on our path. and i believe it will be the people like you and me who wrote about it before it happened, who saw the devil coming, that will walk away from the crash, and be responsible for our further evolution. so write, and vent, but prepare. be mentally ready for anything that could happen. because at this stage in human evolution literally anything is possible.
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I read this and I think about how many people in the world need saving and how many people in the world can save but don't. This includes us. We can talk all we want but it seems that it doesn't change much. But maybe these words will cause the people to rise up and make the change. Make things better for all mankind. sorry maybe I'm just a bit bitter, but maybe I have a right to be. May be I don't but in the end its what I am. One of them. Good luck to you.
Rabbit
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For the feel the same affects -> they
apart of it. -> a part of it/apart in it (?)
for a iceberg -> an iceberg
I think it is a very good write on a subject I've been looking at closely for years. I think the depression is more the result of us not being united anymore than the other way around. They separated us into categories and turned us to hate each other for them, and then, when we were divided, they began to plunder 'we the people' and 'we the people' don't seem to understand that we can undo it all at the next primary election, we only understand that all we can do is sleep through this phase of our undoing until....something...so election cycle after election cycle we don't hear about the competitors, and we re-elect the same smiling faces - pawns owned by some other 'we the people' who don't care -
Wow, I really grasped that concept. I completely agree with you on the depression and grief thing. I really related that poetry to people in my life. That was a really good description of depresion. Great Write!! I hope you get alot of great reviews.
-B♥
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Beautifully written!!!!!
this is a truly beautiful piece, i hope that you get many reviews and that many people read this, you deserved to win that honorable mention, you should've gotten a first place. I hope you write more pieces like this one.
-Anne1122♥♥♫♥♥
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Wow very nice, the flow and the whole just write is amazing. I can see why this is a favorite poem by you! You get the feelings across so well, yes, we ARE living in a state of depression, just no one believes that's the right word. Great great poem.
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This is an awesome poem and so much truth flows through this amazing write. Congratulations for winning the trophy even though to me it deserved the GOLD! God bless you in all that you do and write and keep up the excellent work.
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This is great poetic version of what's going on in our lives as a people. It really gives the reader a "heads-up" to the awful things that are going on. I especially liked the ending, it left me thinking "wow!". The only thing I'm not sure about is the title, but even that is not a big deal, cuz I like it a lot anyhow.
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Thank You For the comment!!!
And what i meant by the title was we have become so deep in our depression we see change as something foolish and not worth the
effort, hope that clears it up.
Thanks for the comment!
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This is awesome. I absoultly love this poem. Its very accurate to what our nation has become. This is really great.
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Well this poem says a LOT. I so agree with every word that you have said in it. The best of luck to you in the contest
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