I want to be teased
Desired
Tortured with pleasure
And need
Electrify me
Send shivers down my spine
Put a knot in my belly
Make me beg
I need a feather-light touch
on my soft, pale skin
Eyes filled with liquid heat
boring into my soul
Make me melt
And moan
Hear me cry out
your name
Worship me, just this once
Empower me
Make me feel like a goddess
and forget who I am
Give me gifts of heat
passion
and sweat
Stoke the fires within
Let me hear the whisper
of flesh against flesh
Make my toes curl
A soft, husky voice
making demands
and promises of pleasure
And sending me into
that red-hot orbit.
Follow me there
Let me feel you fall
over the edge
Panting
and throbbing
Muscles quaking in release
Do this and I promise-
we have just begun
Author notes
Fearylynn
In a list
A contest entry
- EROTICA!!!! Wanting to hold another one.Give me your hottest stuff! by Lucky-Charm.
360 points, ended September 28, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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"Worship me, just this once
Empower me
Make me feel like a goddess"
I love those lines! They made me heat up inside! I like that this piece isn't the typical erotic poem, but stands out in so many ways. Your descriptions were hot, and very well written. I love it!
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Great choice to share, keep writing, very well done.
Ephiphany♥ -
I will admit this was beautiful
but not quite my style
thanks so much for entering
and i wish you the best of luck -
This is a very beautiful write,thank you for entering and good luck!
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Softy Sensual
I like this! Its not disgustingly detailed like some erotica trash I've read. Its beautifully sensual. Awesome first erotica write! Jane
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Very well done. It has a lot of heat and passion but done with much class. I like writes like this..They leave much to the imagination and filling the reader with their own intimate thoughts. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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SUPERB
This piece shows erotica when handled skillfully, as it has been done here, can be great poetry. Not a single word can be substituted with a better one, the passion rising and rising to a crescendo like a rising sea tide finally breaking at the end at the beach.
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Wow, this was just spendid. Not too weird, as far as erotica goes...and the feelings are genuine, and not self serving..(well, in a way, they are.. ), Great write. GL in your contest,
Jin
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WOW! Very sexy piece of work here.Steamy and erotic! I loved it! I first want to say thank you for entering and following rules and now I say goodluck.Thanks again.
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nice..your words here are full of life pulsating..swole like erectile tissue in the urethral sponge. which is appropriate for the subject matter. every stanza is exceptional rife with desire and passion. my favorite stanza is the 4th: Let me hear the whisper
of flesh against flesh
Make my toes curl
A soft, husky voice
making demands
and promises of pleasure
And sending me into
that red-hot orbit.
you end well in a promise that seems very sincere. excellent write
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Thank you. I'm actually a very private person sexually, so I've never written anything like this before. Its very nice to know people like it!
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