September, tousle me
in sunlit warmth of golden laughter!
Glow hawthorn berries red
beneath swaying branches of Rowans
above clustered toadstool caps.
Call nut-hunting squirrels down from trees
and bid fluttering swallows a mute farewell.
Then smoothe the new-ploughed fields
with twilight's soft breath.
When dawn excites the raucous, wheeling crows
bunched in branches still green with leaves,
call gulls and pigeons from the rooftops
and tinge with flame the clouds that hug the hills.
Rouse gusty breezes to rise and spill
upon a sun-streaked sea,
silver bright with brumal light.
This is Free Form.
Please tell me what you think
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Fabulous imagery 'tousle me in sunlit warmth' 'excites the raucous' it is full of movememnt and anticipation. What can I say, every line encapsulates such splendid sight and wonder. Outstanding . Much love Lib x x
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Outstanding
Hi Mum. A lovely write and presentation. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Good word choice and alliteration. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Your words painted a lovely picture. Well penned and much enjoyed.
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Hi, you painted the perfect picture of the season, autumn alwys gives me mixed feelings, lovely poem as usual from you, all the best in the contest,aml Di
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Oh and.......... You've been winkled!!!!!
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This is wonderful. The imagery in this poem painted a clear picture in my mind. I like how the entire poem seems to be a command to September. I really like the opening two lines. This is simply beautiful and i don't know what else to say.
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this is very beautiful. such wonderful images brought to mind through your words, this was a real pleasure to read. thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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thank you so much for this entry into the contest. Your very first lines set the tone for this autumnal dedication----and the second stanza is one that I observe on a daily basis from my window. Pigeons have invaded my roof for the last couple of weeks and the gulls are making their presence known as well. I live fairly close to the Bay. Thanks again and best wishes,
reenie
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Great
Beautiful imagery and lots of things that reminds me of a delightful September day.
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You paint such amazing imagery with your words, this is truly beautiful and flows so smoothly from the tongue. Line 13 is my absolute favourite in this, the alliteration is subtle indeed yet very effective. Thank you for sharing Grams, love you always. Laura x
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Pretty images here nice wonderful free verse is good to see from you...I felt the poem come alive in this
the waters can paint a fancy picture as you sit and watch activities,thanks for sharing,love and many blessings moonie..
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Hi, what a joy it was to read true freeverse and not prose put into short lines, wonderful images, a very beautiful poem, aml Di
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