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to stay true

what can they be talking about?
it makes me agitated
feeling weird
I'm just me
can't they tell
i get so tired of their cliques
and so wish i were not visible
then the musician and early cynic
lying quiescent in my being
take hold and tell me
to use this moment of awkwardness
and remember to use it
to keep me humble
to keep me true

Author notes

ack... having two teens i understand their need to fit in...yet remain a unique individual and not a sheep. peace...desi... Oh I chose pic #1...and to whomever used Lady's pics of her daughter.. I'll THUMP you if i see it happen again...grrrrrrrrr...

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  • grannyeri gold member
    October 29, 2007

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    One cannot please everyone; really only need to be comfortable and satisfied with who they themslves are. Easy to read and understand - liked the flow and message you share here.


  • Shakes-spear
    September 16, 2007

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    Here here

    being origonal is a good thing, but you will never be accepted by everyone. I like you just theway you are1 the Shaker

  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 14, 2007

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    wonderful poem here,love to watch kids grow and experiment with growth,good luck in this contest..
    MM


  • HeavenScent4U
    September 14, 2007

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    i usually do not comment on poems entered into my contests until after i judge them but i am going to make THE exception here. it's kind of funny that you ended this poem with "to keep me humble, to keep me true" only in that, my daughter and older brothers kind of have this motto, it's short and simple "STAT TRUE" so you kind of nailed something in saying that.

    when i think of my daughter and most teens these days, as much as they like to say they're individuals, a lot of them are quite the same as in being followers but i could see so much of my daughter in this write. these lines were really great....

    "then the musician and early cynic
    lying quiescent in my being
    take hold and tell me
    to use this moment of awkwardness
    and remember to use it
    to keep me humble
    to keep me true"

    i like the moment of awkwardness and remembering to use it very good look into this picture. please do not reply to my comment until after i judge the contest as to keep it anonymous. thanks for entering my contest and best of luck. be well and be blessed

    oh, and thanks for your support in your closing lines here