I'm so fucking sick
Of all of your lies
I told you to stop
And so I advised
But you only lashed forward
And reached out that long hand
You took me ,a neck full
And screeched out commands
You told me I’m pathetic
You told me to stop
You said “Keep your moth shut”
“Or I’ll make your head pop”
And so he continued
And so I can’t breathe
I was falling downward
I was on my knees
But it wasn’t yet over
Though he thought he had won
I brought my hands upward
And made right, what was wrong
I dug my claws deeply
In his neck, as he’d mine
I brought all skin forward
And blood had been flung
O’ it squirt in my hair
And it got in my face
But O’ it was wonderful
I showed him his place
He fell to the floor
A yell he did make
Such pain I’d inflicted
And such a “piece of cake”
As he kneeled on the floor
I thought in my head
Damn you! You fucker!
You ought to be dead
So I looked down below me
Such anger withdrew
And I killed that damn fucker
If only you knew!
Author notes
Option 10
Strangle
death n-a picture=username
A contest entry
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950 points, ended September 25, 2007, 18 entries
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Absoultly amazing such vivid pictures and it reminds me of a poem I wrtoe called "Put Me In My Place" it's a 3 parter but besides that I loved the poem keep up the great writing.
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read Sylvia Plath if you don't already.
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thanks, okay so how do i read them, what do they write, sorry if i'm being stupid!
i may have read them, but you never know, lol -
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Sylvia plath i recommend reading her collection of poetry
"ariel"
also reading her autobiographical novel the bell jar
she was a genious
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is she on her, or will i have to research it and everything, lol?
whats she write about?
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wow i loved it awosome job!!!!!!!!
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STUNNING AND DARK!!!
BRILLIANT ANGRY DARK PIECE THIS IS. WONDERFUL RHYME AND FLOW. I LOVED THE POWER AND EMOTION BEHIND THIS. THIS IS ONE GREAT PIECE. WELL DONE HONEY.
WAYNE
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I cant tell exactly what this was about weather it being an abusive boyfriend or an abusive father...And i know how this feels to be abused i had an abusive step father as a child and now he just died like a week ago not bc of me but he got cancer so what goes around comes around..Thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest!!
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