Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

Twilight

Twilight smiles at me,
her pearly dentures sunk to the bottom of  her water glass.
Arthritic joints creak, and she slips into wrinkles and gray
like I slip into the seat farthest from her.
She swirls the dentures with a spoon, just as,
behind her shoulder, pink swirls over the world’s chin,
disfiguring the pure face like the zit on Twilight’s chin.

Twilight motions for a waiter.
For a second, he and another waiter get tangled, but he
dances away, graceful as a gazelle, then
moves, a blur of specter-white chopstick legs .
He frowns as she lifts her dentures back into her mouth,
and she smiles at him, clacking out some
request.

I can almost smell the aroma of muscle rub
and moth balls rising up off her skin, and I wonder
if she isn't hiding something in her deep creases.

If I believed in it, I could Botox myself
young forever, but what can she do?
Twilight fades outside, and part of the
darkness seeps in through the cracks
in the walls, burying itself inside me
to a secret place where, one day, it will
be kept tucked  within my wrinkles,
the secret of youth...
       

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • FeedYourHeadMeg
    September 13, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    "Twilight smiles at me,
    her pearly dentures sunk to the bottom of her water glass" What a great start to a poem with those first 2 lines.

    "Arthritic joints creak, and she slips into wrinkles and gray" is my favorite line of this poem.

    Twilight motions for a waiter.
    For a second, he and another waiter get tangled, but he
    dances away, graceful as a gazelle, then
    moves, a blur of specter-white chopstick legs" I thought this seemed a little awkward. Sorry!

    I also really love "I can almost smell the aroma of muscle rub
    and moth balls rising up off her skin, and I wonder
    if she isn't hiding something in her deep creases."

    Greatgreatgreat job sweetie!