I like your blood
All over my hands
The redness it glistens
It is my demand
And your throat i will rip out
I'll grasp your warm flesh
I'll tear it to pieces
I feel so refreshed
God' feeling your hair now
I want to lash out
I'll pull every inch now
And please do not pout
If you even look at me
You really will pay
I'll pull out your eyes
In every way
Now look at me darling
Cause i'm something to fear
There's no chance of survival
None of that is found here
I'm here for your life, yes
I really must say
The enjoyment of torment
Is simply my way
I'll break you down slowly
Your going to cry
I'll rip your damn tongue out
Your going to die
I love how my heart pounds
The pleasure, divine
When i pull your red heart out
It's gonna be mine
And the blood how it splatters
Goes every way
Your dying, my passion
It happens today
Author notes
Wait till you see the after mess!
A contest entry
- 'killer instinct' by second-born.
600 points, ended September 14, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Call Of The Zombie by Dmonik.
2550 points, ended September 24, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your BEST Prewrite! - For Mike [degarmo] - by Never Fall in Love.
950 points, ended October 29, 2007, 130 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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must be angry with somebody this is a very good descriptive right good luck in the contest and congrats on the previous trophies
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Holy shit
please dont mind my language
but this is amazing. Dark poems that rhyme usually tends to sound cliché and so fake - removes all effect of the poem. But your rhyming here certainly added to that effect. I really enjoyed reading this..
Good Luck in the contest and thank you for entering
Never ♥
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thank you for sharing your talent with me through this wonderful write. i wish you well in the contest that we both have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Dude, this is an awesome poem, and you're an awesome poet. I love this one.
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NIce structure and rhyme. The picture painted with blood is good. Good luck in the contest.
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i like your descriptions in this piece. good luck in the contest.
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i love it. good stuff. reminds me of m
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Pleasurable…the poem definitely was a fine display of ‘killer instinct’ with its full details of gore scenes like ‘your throat I will rip out’ and ‘I'll pull out your eyes in every way’ but sadly…it exceeded my limitation of showing the prompt in less than 66 words…
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STUNNING AND DARK
STUNNING AND DARK. THIS IS BRILLIANT WRITING STEPH. I LOVE THIS. THE RHYME AND EVERYTHING IS SUPERB. WONDERFUL WRITING.
WAYNE
x
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wow---------------------- dark and i think this is so well writen well done girl
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Someone should visit the Psych ward on the worner of west and 3rd ave...
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You've taken a normally sick, and twisted subject and morphed into a very alluring piece. I can almost feel the lust for bloodshed, but yet a niggling of fear creeps up my spine as I see this through a victim's eyes. Truly amazing piece, gore and all.
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wow
omgosh how i love this...your my perfect poet in my eyes..i love your gory style and how you can make my spine shudder i just love it your am amazing poet hun...its beautiful this poem all of your poems...i love the way you write and perfectly rhyme..*hugs* great write keep it up
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Woah
OMG I have to say it's very VERY gory, but oddly still beautiful at the same time Good job!!!
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