The runes, they call me in my sleep,
Their secrets, I guard and keep,
Draw a rune, and think on it.
The runes, they dwell in a secret place,
Their Meaning,no-one ever escapes,
Draw a rune, and give it space.
The runes, they are alive in my heart,
Their teachings,are about to start,
Draw a rune and place it apart.
The runes, I treat with great respect,
Their feelings, I darest not upset,
Draw a rune with a hopeful prospect.
The runes, I give with love and grace,
Their lessons learnt within this place,
Draw a rune for the human race.
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Runes....
Heh, I like this one.
As always,
Well done.
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Interested
What type of runes do you work with? An ex-girlfriend of mine used to work with runes.
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What type of runes?
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this is a excellent write, and one which deserves the feature it has been given. it almost mezmerises the reader into the flow of the poem and creates a really powerful sense of ancient sorcery if that makes any sense. I like how you have ended this as it to me feels like it makes the poem command respect which is excellent for this poem. i especially like how you have repeated the words "Draw a rune" this was a excellent idea for this poem and one which has worked really well, a excellent write here
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I sometimes use runes for divination, and I loved this work!!! You really made me feel the electricity I get from casting runes! Very very nice!
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This is a wonderful poem filled with unique
terms that wrap their visions around the reader.
the first stanza is my favorite.
"The runes, they call me in my sleep,
Their secrets, I guard and keep,
Draw a rune, and think on it. Nice.
So others can see what this relates to:
http://www.sunnyway.com/runes/intro.html
It'll help with why this was written and how.
This would also do well in a lyric category. I can
hear a piano with the mystical celtic
strings.
*Suggestion*
I would lift as much punctuation from this. Poetry
doesn't need them all.....the poem must ascend and 'fly', unlike prose that must rest its feet
into the ground.
~~ The second lines of the 3rd and 4rth stanzas contain a rhymed word that appears 'forced' to me.
Perhaps if the meter didn't jump, it would flow or another word chosen. Just an idea.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to the site.
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