Once where true love I did find,
are now dark clouds of my mind.
You lit up my life when you came in,
like never before it had been.
The pain you caused was so vast,
when you made your choice at last.
Maybe I wouldn't be here crying,
if I'd known earlier you'd been lying.
Problems we'd had
for an age,
we put it off,
we delayed.
All those nights you 'worked late',
when really you were out on dates.
Were they worth it? I hope so,
because now your family has to go.
We won't be back, rest assured,
when I go I will bold the doors.
My heart is now one of the rare,
for its been replaced by dark despair.
Author notes
When reading the options this came to me, its option 2.
My {♥}heart doesn't beat the way it used too.'
pinktat
A contest entry
- Spinning Me In Circles[lets put my heart back together] by WishMeAway--x.
700 points, ended September 19, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow!!this was for a contest.but the sadness came from your heart.it must have been an awful time for you my friend.
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Very good
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A Very Powerful Poem
This is a very powerful poem. Your words here, so simply spoken, carry so much feeling that they touch the heart. They certainly touched mine. I felt every word of this excellent poem. I wish you all Good Luck in the contest. Thankyou for writing this poem and sharing it with me. All my very best wishes from Rose xxx A for you x
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Very strong emotion you penned.
I could feel every word of
this.
Wonderful writing!
Best wishes!
~Pastel
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Something about your poems continually touches me... Your story is told through them... Even though much of it is a mystery as to what is real, and what is not, I can feel what you feel through the expressions and descriptions you use. I love reading your poems pinktat... Keep up the good work
Absolutely beautiful write
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nice rhyme.
and alot of ouchy emotions in here. loved it.
good luck
♥love.
--x
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