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The Hillside


 

 

 

 


A maiden sat on a hillside weeping, weeping for her loss. She had no knight. She desperately wanted one. A man passing by asked her why she cried.

"I have no knight! I am all alone."

The man replied, "I am sure one will be along this road presently. I will sit and wait for him with you."

The man sat with the maiden. They talked about everything under the sun. He was knowledgable about plants, birds, animals, and geology. She was learned in stories and poetry. Many days passed as they waited for a knight, yet, they passed peacefully. The days were full of warmth and conversation. Neither could remember such pleasant times.


Their personalities were complimentary. They both found themselves wondering if they would rather a knight never show up. It seemed to go on and on, as if it would never end.

One day robbers came down the road. They drew their swords and threatened the maiden and the man if they did not surrender all of their valuables. The man simply laughed. He said that the robbers could have their choice. He would either give them his valuables or a note that would fetch them five times as much in town. They could have their pick. The robbers said that they would get both or kill him. The man said it was OK, he had lived a full life. If they didn't want the money they were free to kill him. The robbers were frustrated. They grabbed the maiden and said they would torture her if he did not give them both the note and his valuables. The man laughed.

"You are such fools! She means nothing to me. She is betrothed to a knight. I am just resting for a moment upon the trail."

The robbers let her go and agreed to take the note. They read it.

  "Dear Banker:

When you see me come into town, take five pieces of gold and give it to the man with this note."

 

  nbsp;   -Signed, The Man

 


Knowing they had been outwitted, they took the note and left, happy to get the five pieces of gold.

The woman was very unhappy. She told the man she would rather have suffered the contempt of the
robbers rather than hear him say she meant nothing to him.

"So, you believed that?" He asked.

"You said it, didn't you?" She replied.

"I was managing a situation." He said.

"I'd have rather you managed it differently. You should have fought them off and never said such things." She turned her back on him.

 

"But, you were not harmed...?"

 

"Not by them!" She said.

 

The man stood and wondered what to do next... outwitting deadly robbers was one thing, but women... that was quite another...

 

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  • myrataal silver member
    September 15, 2007

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    This is clever and luverly ...

    BUT OH ALL! You could have managed a better ending!

    "I love you with all of me, Maiden Mine ... and these days together were the best I ever experienced."

    "Oh beloved Knight mine! I forgive you your lie ... Thank you for turning up at last!"

    Their kiss lasted forever.

    Love
    Always Myra


    • PerVirtuous gold member
      September 15, 2007
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      If only the minds of real flesh and blood people were so open. I expect in this story that he honestly wants to find her a knight, because it is what she wants, and she expects him to be her knight, whithout realizing it or voicing it. Neither one can see the other side of the mountain.

  • Amera gold member
    September 14, 2007

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    You poor man, you composed a story that makes perfect sense and you, the author don't understand it. Why is that? This is a great story Allan and one that you can tell at bedtime and make someone very special very happy and have sweet dreams.

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • Stormraven
    September 14, 2007
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    Hmmmm....This kinda sorta happened to me the other day lol...Some men !! Storm


  • rhondasail
    September 13, 2007

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    ...but still he has not said that which would win her heart and trust again, but then he never said he wanted them did he?...hmmm... very good story...pretty realistic portrayal of men and women and the difference of 'language' they speak...just a tiny bit chauvenistic though...but since it is in the days of old setting we'll just let it pass...lol...You have great poetic and storytelling skills, Alan...Peace, Rhonda

  • Arzab
    September 13, 2007
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    Interesting story. Great imagery. I liked the ending. It was thought provoking. Even if people go through situations in life where they are lucky to not be physically hurt, there can still be a risk of getting emotionally hurt in life. Keep writing.


  • Cinnarry gold member
    September 13, 2007
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    heh..trifling bitches aren't we?


  • Klayer
    September 13, 2007
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    lovly work. Simply great

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