You see me before you,
I am broken and dry,
Cry no more tears do I,
Pain set in and made me dead,
The world sees nothing,
To me I see pain,
My heart lays in this field,
Shattered and Lost,
Left for desolation,
Dry ground gives me no water,
By your hand I became this,
Torn and Shredded by grief,
Burn this field and set me free,
I can no longer look upon myself,
For this is death
Living just to shadow the ground,
But dead to life I speak not,
Crown of Dark emotions toil,
Soil of death overtakes me,
Broken Stalks my spirit is,
Left forgotten by all
A contest entry
- Stalk Talk - PIF Closes tomorrow morning by CarolDesjarlais.
600 points, ended September 14, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you like this song?
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Oh, burn this field....what a great image and anology here. Could you check, "destolation,
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Yes, I will check it out. I think I spelled it correctly. If not I will fix it.
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Great work love the flow you write free verse very well and the imagery is overwhelming best of luck to you in this contest...
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Thank you.
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WOW! This was a really really powerful poem! Your words were strong, emotional and very powerful! I can relate to this poem alot..abuse leaves you feeling empty and takes a part of you that you can never replace no matter how hard you try! You are a very talented author! I really enjoyed reading this. It flowed really smoothly and was so sad. I also really like the picture that you added at the top of your poem it fit well! Keep writting your talented!
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Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed this. I wanted to share my dryness with the world. I am glad you like my work. It is just my pain poured out with ink.
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