People say it's simple
But I guess that's just the way
We do not need to obfuscate
The fact that it is day
We do not need a PhD
To understand the night
We need not wrap ourselves in thought
And end up in a fright
For what's wrong with simplicity
When all you need to say
Is peace my friends, we're in the now
So have a lovely day
To add to this a myriad
Of abstact nouns in thought
Would be to disrespect what is
And replace with an ought
And I don't feel the need to should
Or would, or even if
I'd rather be at one right now
Just get on, yes, and live
The modal language, often used
Is not what really is
So what's the use in trying
Lest to end up in a fizz
I'll take a breath, so simply done
Yet complex in its make
I spend the night asleep
And in the morning I shall wake
The sun will rise upon this earth
And then again to fall
It's all OK, indeed it is
For you, for me, for all
Please tell me what you think
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Thanks for commenting on my poem - I thought I'd check out yours. I really like this it cheers me up!
this is my fave bit :'I'll take a breath, so simply done,
Yet complex in its make'
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wow, i really like that. I noticed how many people tend to complicate simple things to make them look important.what makes me angry is ...who said simple things aren't important?? you did a great job. thank you for sharing it
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I comment all the time that simplicity lends power to a poem- I believe that, whole heartedly. When you simplify (whether it is poetry or life) I think you tend to boil things down to what is most important. That makes everything more meaningful.
I am enjoying your poetry very much- and look forward to pigging out on more of it!
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I find this very beautiful in its simplicity.
My first impression is the simplicity of the words brings a person to a depth of thoughts about what life really is like. You have done an amazing job with this. Emotionally I could really feel the depth of your thoughts in the wording of this. This is not a bit awkward to read, therefore does not need to be changed. The title and first lines compliment eahc other very well. The last line sums this in the very best way possible. Very well done. My favorite part is the last verse.
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Thank you for your comments, you have touched on exactly what this poem is about and I am glad that I have been able to convey that in the words. I am beginning to feel that simple words can travel deeper into a person and be immediately understood, whilst at the same time providing a place from which to look at the complexities of expeience and its illusions.
Thanks again!
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Wonderful,you have written so well and so cleverly so much about the simplicity of Nature.The process of Day ,Night.Man has done so much but cant change a microsecond of time.All fixed for eons.This is good,especially how the words have a synchronised rhyming flow.Thanks for sharing
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Serenity
What a lovely write-I liked the idea behind it, just, chill out. Get on, stop stressing, lol, at your clever use of words-why complicate stuff eh?
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