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Leave Me Breathless

Laying before him

 essence bared


 seeking not lovemaking

but adoration in tender passions


slow light fingertips caress

kisses upon my entire soul


 strokes so sensual my flesh tingles

heart desires,thighs tremble 

under touch of love's yearning


 

  appreciation of difference

between fire and erotic weakness

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Make me blush

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  • Topaze gold member
    August 12, 2008
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    A lovely piece indeed, woven and sultry. thank you for your fine entry in this contest.


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    June 24, 2008
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    beautfully written. I feel your words

  • mcfreeman
    June 9, 2008
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    Great Explaination:

    I seek adoration. An insight. Thank you.


  • artis
    November 29, 2007
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    wow, what an invitation and what a thrill to live up to it, multiple orgasms aside, the mere act of opening up all of your nerve endings to the most intensely unique sensations ever known would be sheer bliss at the least, and nirvana minus a nightie at

    best. I can almost taste your heaving bud, slip sliding across my lips and tongue, as I pin it gently down and lap dance on it, then deeply insert my probe in your silken well, and digitally insert, just opposite it to feel my swirling through that thin membraned wall,...wow, see what you did to me, carried away...completely,...sorry...lol.~Artis


  • GoodKnightPoet
    November 10, 2007

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    a stroke so sensual my flesh tingles. A great line. I think this poem is wonderful. I don't agree with some of the negative comments you received.


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    September 13, 2007

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    A wonderful and sensual take on the picture.
    Very nicely done.
    Thank you for entering and good luck.

    Storm


  • dustookie2
    September 13, 2007

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    This takes me to a higher place I was captured by your title as it set up the ambience of the poem. The breath of a dream so real and sensual breathless dreams are just so hauntingly beautiful. Nicely penned.

  • Liquid memories
    September 12, 2007

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    Wowwwwww Lisa

    where did you get this one? this is quite a write, stirs the imagination and heat the page. lol. very nice. sensual and just the breath. Thanks for sharing this one. wow.


  • Melvina
    September 12, 2007

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    the poem is good, but the word seekth really threw me off because it doesn't fit with rest of the poem. Try to stay away from mixing word styles, unless you are simply amazing at it.
    ~cheers~

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