Back to the sound of the blank page.
Back to the glide of the slick, black pen.
After walking 365 steps forward,
Until there were holes in my feet,
I'm back to a chaotic head.
And whimpering fingers too numb
to grip the tool to
Emancipate the swirling sorrows like clawing monsters
from my spinning chakras
my misaligned thoughts.
How simply it all becomes unraveled
as the spinning wheel grinds
To a halt
And the end product seems to be
left in the hands of a Maker
with attentive apathy.
Embrace the uncertainty of
an existence which thrives
For planning and pattern only found
In the masterful science of
Know thyself.
An expression only known as a hollow
Triumph
As trembling fingers return
To dry, silent, paper
And the glide of the slick, black pen.
A contest entry
- AP Book Contest-- get published! by tinuelena.
900 points, ended September 19, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITES ONLY by wingsofgold25.
500 points, ended September 28, 2007, 117 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Unique and Flowing by OnlyOneLifeToLive.
402 points, ended October 11, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you for sharing this. The first stanza hooked me.
There are echos of words I've thought, emotions I've felt. I am glad to see that you have won a trophy on this. I think you deserve that.
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This piece has a lot of symbolism and has a good message behind it. I love your words they fit together well. And i love your quote "Know thyself". It is one of my favorites. Thankyou for sharing it with us =)
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Good flow.
What a good flow of ideas. You have captured the agony of as well as the reward found in writing. Agony at the prospect of failure to get a prize in a contest or failure to get published but all the same the penmanship in you demands expression so inevitably you write more and more. Hopefully we all get better with experience and thus end up getting published/ winning contests etc.
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The structure of this piece is very strong, and well laced with emotional tones. You blended them together nicely. The way it is it can be simply witers block, yet it could also be much more than that. Your diction was well chosen; it gave it life and did not seem like you were trying to make it sound all fancy. Of course This is just what I get from this read. I enjoyed this very much, thank you for sharing with us.
F~E
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Thank you so much, Forest! It started out as a few lines that got stuck in my head everytime I went for a walk. It just kind of grew from there . . . at the time I was 'stuck' (in a terrible relationship, an awful apartment, and spending too much time in my bathrobe on the couch). This is one of my favorites . . . thank you for the kind critique . . . I am glad you enjoyed it!
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Very nice. As a writer that often gets writers block and can relate. This is a very unique poem and original in the way it was written. Thank you very much for entering!
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Thank you for the compliment . . . this contest is full of talent and excellent writes. It is a privledge to be writing along side people who are welcoming and receptive.
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I really liked it, i felt it really portrayed the way many writers, of any genre, feel when writing. It is truly phenominal how you were able to portray such fantastic imagery within your poetry, and i really love that line 'To dry, silent, paper
And the glide of the slick, black pen.' because it is so smooth and it really flows together. Your title works really well because it relates the whole poem together and gives you a heads up of what it's about. Your second last paragraph is also really strong, and I really love your line breaks in it. Overall a fantastic write!! Oh and the 365 steps forward makes me think of the days of the year, as if time is flying with each step, a millenium between words. I really love the way that makes me think. Keep up the great writing!!
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Thank you for your entry Good Luck in the contest.
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I love the part about the "Maker, with attentive apathy" Nice. Good poem.
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Mmm...the dreaded "writer's block" suffered by most, feared by many
The empty feeling when one takes up the pen or sits infront of the computer and nothing is forthcoming...a little death, I call it, but it passes
Clever write, very much enjoyed the repetition of the line "And the glide of the slick, black pen" Bravo 
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Very nice imagery through out and I'm sure that everyone of us will be able to relate to the feelings expressed. Good work.
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ooo, I love how the poem comes full circle by ending and begining with the same lines! Woot! Anywho, I hate writtes block. lol Good Job
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