Baby put your stone hands on me
The cold is on me
And I'm sinking low
Hard times are on me
And I need you so
Baby put your hands on me
Press your soul down hard upon me
I'm falling fast
I'm full of need
Press down those stone hard hands on me
Baby, I'm down here
Way deep down dark here
My lamp turned low
Weighted down
Pushed to the ground
Wrestling with woe
Thinking about those stone hard hands
So goddamned cold
Baby put your hands upon me
Lay them heavy hard hands down on me
Be my stone angel
My angel of soul
I need your hardness
To absolve this cold
Baby put your hands on me
Them stone cold hands upon me
Hard times are on me
And I need you so
Baby put them hands on me
press your love down on me
Hard times are upon me
And I need you so
Yeah hard times are upon me
And I need you so
A contest entry
- ok so entertain me by hungermuncher.
600 points, ended September 27, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Songs, Songs and more Songs by Dark Soul Reaper.
360 points, ended October 25, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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There is a dark hunger in these words. Deep and powerful writing.
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LOved it! Rich with textures and layers!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
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Be my stone angel
My angel of soul
I need your hardness
To absolve this cold
I love these lines. I'm glad you joined the group and decided to post some of your poetry. Very well penned!
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Hi, stone hands?, to what does this refer?
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hi
use your immagination
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I got lost in this. This was stunning writing that I enjoyed completely. Wonderful flow here. Very very deep writing indeed. I love those stone hands.
Wayne
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Wow... very good. I like it. Keep up the hard work and don't stop penning. You have a great flow. Good job and thanks for entering.
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this is good well done best of luck j
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awesome, thats absolutely awesome. i love that flow you have going on and i can just hear the music already. I love it.. Nice to hear from you too. take care, from the New New jersey boy.
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brutally beautiful...awesome job!
wonderful flow too, loved it! It would make a great
pounding song...I was listening to Nickelback when
I read this...their song, This is how you remind me of
what I really am....I'm point blank telling you that
your words flowed with their tune and beat, the lead
singer singing "I've been down to the bottom of every
bottle...and then your words, Baby put your hands on
me, them stone cold hands upon me" as I was reading,
it was really eerie like you were leading HIS song!
You are a really interesting writer, keep it up!
You are bold and not afraid of the words, no hiding
for you!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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ears2hearyou
What an awesomely inspiring comment! Thanks so much! I love Nickleback and "This is How You Remind Me" happens to be one of my favourite tunes by them. I thought it strange that you mentioned those two facts... I was not listening to them at the time of this write nor had I for awhile ...wow, you made me feel great!!!
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This is pretty good. You really got my attention and you kept it! that's great! I love how you start out with Baby put your hands on me... in every stanza almost. great work! Baby put your hands on me
Lay your heavy hands upon me
You're my stone angel
My stone angel of soul
Put them hands on me
Lay heavy hands upon me
I need your hardness
To absolve this cold
is my favorite stanza! great work! keep it up! and good luck in the contest!
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oooooooooooo its a songggg
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Soulful!
This could almost be sung as it flows like lyrics to a song. Really enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest. Julie.
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Full of real emotion. This is really good. I enjoyed reading this very much. Keep them coming. I will read more later.
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