why do you think it's a game
when I'm hurt or crying?
why is it I'm always to blame?
will it still be funny when I'm dying?
I'm done being your little play toy
I'm not hurting myself anymore to please you
you used to be my favorite boy
but it hurts,the things you do.
you only care when i show whats inside
but not everything can I keep bottled in
sometimes I should'nt have to hide
you don't always have to win.
I'm not going to hurt myself over you
you made your choice awhile ago
I'm not going to worry about what you do
which means your gonna have to find somewhere else to go.
Author notes
ok this is about a guy i love but he believes we are just friends with benefits
im giving him up though
A contest entry
- Friends With Benefits by star crossed.
310 points, ended September 25, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Kiss This Thing Goodbye (And Bury the Past) by trista.
450 points, ended November 21, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think it's great you've come to a point where you know this guy just isn't what you need, and want to move on. It's a tough decision to make, but one that I hope leads you to happiness with someone you can depend on, share your feelings with, and know you've been heard and understood.
I am not generally a fan of poetry that doesn't use capped letters in either the title or the poem itself, but having good punctuation helps so much in that, which I'm glad you have done. There are a couple of typos in your 3d stanza..."whats" should be "what's" and "should'nt" should be "shouldn't". The rhyming is not forced exactly, but very simple. Are you familiar with rhymezone.com? If not, it's a fantastic resource for poetry writing that you may want to check out.
There's a lot of heart in this write, and I wish you all the best. Thank you so much for your entry; I enjoyed reading this.
Good luck and best wishes,
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I'm in the exact same situation though I'm not moving on, so this hits a soft spot for me. You say this very clearly. I'm sorry to hear he doesn't respect you more than that. It makes me sad
I hope things will be ok with you.
~Diana
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An emotional write. My friend with benefits it seemed was my best friend. Evertime she was up at my house she would want to do something. Me being a lesbian and her being bi and having a boyfriend that was hard for me. This my dear is a very emotional write. I enjoyed the read.
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I found it a sensitive poem with good feeling although I do think that the rhyming could be a bit deeper,I think you did a god job at expressing though.
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i love this. Its so great.
Df, 14 -
awesome
I really like this one. It just fits what I'm feeling perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
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