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- Emerald Blanket Turned Over -

 

 

 

 

 

 

The earth trembled with words spoken in hush
when quakes erupted quietly throughout
acres of land lightning loudly awakened
within full view for all to witness
as mouth lay agape.

 

Land connected, speechless to spell
cast on soil turned silent
from fingers in search of another
to hold with firm grasp,
not letting go.

 

Skies darkened, skewered the horizon
while light pierced to bring peace
also allow path for Spirit to walk,
continue on its journey with integrity.

North and South joined at juncture,
brought blessings to spread wealth
over those retired who rested eternally
six feet underneath earth's blanket.

Sunflowers laid atop with love
amidst thunderous thoughts in distance
where electric empathy sighted
behind numerous clouds of condolences.

Shadows lingered longer than anticipated
but left bouquet to flourish
in private patches on emerald quilt
where breath of life ceased to exhale.


Author notes

Username: Desire

Picture Prompt:
http://i8.tinypic.com/4qylhdd.jpg

When I held the prompt close to heart-
this is what came forth...
kept thinking of those who are in *eternal gardens*
and some get visitors while others do not
yet Mother Nature pays visits daily
in one way or another and constantly turns
the covers of their emerald blankets.

Bonus One:
The picture prompt-inspiration touched me deeply because the words within the picture
rings true for me and my beliefs. I do speak of Love and Light to be shared with all
and the connection to the prompt completed the feeling I harbor.
To have this on your computer is wonderful because with what we constantly see on the news...
Life is greater than death
And love is greater than either.
I also felt your love for geckos...is a gift...
where another may turn away in disgust...
or lack of understanding-
You embrace their beauty for what
benefits-blessings they bring to Mother Earth
and how they touch-enrich
your-our lives in some way.

Wish more would allow that to seep
into their hearts-Spirit's.

Bonus Two:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3373276
Poetryality
A Natural Conduit

Read this Wonderful piece and felt the connection
to the thunder-lightning...
(I read offline so need to make comment)
The love for another so I picked this one
for the second bonus.

In a list

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

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    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
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    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

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  • Swan song gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    This was really lovely dear. It took my breath away as you always do. The flow of this poem was so overwhelming I was caught up in it so quickly

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    September 19, 2007

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    -emerald blanket turned over- by desire

    Title - 9
    Style - 8
    Form - 8
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 9
    Originality - 9
    Reaction - 9
    Rules - 10
    Makes sense - 9
    Enjoyable - 9

    total: 90


  • Celticmoon
    September 16, 2007

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    - Emerald Blanket Turned Over - by Desire


    Title - 10
    Style - 7
    Form - 7
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 8
    Originality - 9
    Reaction - 7
    Rules - 10*
    Makes sense - 10
    Enjoyable - 7


    total: 85


  • thepoetssoul
    September 15, 2007

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    What a great poem you have written.
    I really love your imagery and flow
    Heartfelt indeed your pen wet the page with brilliance.
    Best of wishes to you

    Tony


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 14, 2007

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    Excellent!

    Another masterpiece here you have created! Wow!
    You weave such indepth content like no-one's bizz!
    Thanks for sharing you, and your talented pen within.

    Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • Frodofan silver member
    September 14, 2007
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    lol. Ok. 20 points to your score.


    115


  • Amera gold member
    September 14, 2007

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    This is wonderful in poetic flow and powreful vivid image. You bring nature to life as you weave your magic with words. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Frodofan silver member
    September 13, 2007

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    Not sure what your guess is for the first bonus, so let me know.

    I liked this pretty well, but it many of the breaks seemed slightly abrupt.

    Title - 10
    Style - 6
    Form - 7
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 8
    Originality - 10
    Reaction - 7
    Rules - 10*
    Makes sense - 10
    Enjoyable - 7


    Bonus: 10

    total: 95


    And I'm flattered that you think my love for geckos is a gift. Most people just think I'm crazy! Good luck!


    • Desire gold member
      September 14, 2007
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      Sorry about that...for bonus one...
      amidst my ramblings
      I thought You had the picture in Your computer because of Your zest for Life and respect for Death
      and Love for geckos
      Love being very strong for what You currently do
      and continue to do
      for I felt that the word and meaning for Love
      did not have to just be for another human being.
      Hopefully that better explains my explanation
      ...


  • Silenced one
    September 13, 2007

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    Amazing as usual

    As usual when you write I am left speechless. You have a way of putting amazing life into everything you write. As with this one. I could feel the emabrace of nature in every line of this poem. Excellent write.

    Silenced


  • Mari Goes gold member
    September 13, 2007

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    I love the way you embrace nature and bring it into words.
    Lovely verses, soft alliterations, beautiful poem

    Mari

  • Turtle74
    September 13, 2007

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    your ties to mother nature are deep yet you live in a city how so? in this peice i see what i believe in, no matter how nasty mother nature seems it will always be for the better.


  • Bedroom Eyes
    September 12, 2007

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    Great depth in this piece!

    It really makes you think, and draws you back again to make sure a nuance wasn't missed!

    Well done!!!

    Best of luck to you in the contest!!!


  • Kyn
    September 12, 2007

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    "over those retired who rested eternally
    six feet underneath earth's blanket."

    So eloquently spoken! I loved it!


  • HaleyMary
    September 12, 2007

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    Powerful write. There was beautiful imagery in this piece and the poem seemed to have a peaceful and spiritual aspect to it. It made me think of being in a cemetery and
    grieving. This was a superb write. Best of luck to you in the contest.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    You leave me in awe as usual dear talented friend. You depth and vision is incredible. I love the entire poem, but the ending is so wonderful. Very well written. Awesome imagery. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • penman gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    Incredible

    Once again sweetness your pen poured forth such gold. A true treasure for the heart and soul.


  • StarEyes
    September 12, 2007

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    Holy smokes girl!!!!! What a read this one is! As I have said before I help care for cemetaries in town, and well I know what you mean, I see some with new flowers placed and planted by loved ones, and some that nothing ever changes on..... If it weren't for Mother Nature, and those of us that mow the grass there, they would have nothing..... Such a shame.

    Ok, I am rambling again, LOL. Great job on this one!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and much love

    Nettie


  • delightfulmess silver member
    September 12, 2007

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    WHOA WOW WOW!!
    I just read this 4 times and it is masterfully profound.

    "where electric empathy sighted
    behind numerous clouds of condolences"

    These two lines struck me big time...
    When my dad passed this is what it felt like
    Like a storm brewing of of condolences that I had to escape or drown.
    When all was passed I was thankful for them though.

    Look you have me chatting away.

    Wonderful write. good luck in the contest.



    luv ya
    Delila





  • Frodofan silver member
    September 12, 2007
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    lol. It does look much more attractive now.

    • Desire gold member
      September 12, 2007
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      I'm using a different computer so my eyes went
      when I first posted

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