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Eyes of Secrets...

Missing image

Shining like yellow diamonds
spreading this special glow
All there is to feel, experience
I see in those eyes…

A few secrets kept within
Exhausting me all over
Invisible pain hidden
To afraid to break out
and reflecting now on me

Time after time the same
When the darkness falls
and it’s all coming back…
This thin line,
between dreams and reality

Running and hiding
Pushing away how it felt
But there is no way out
They keep following me
Hunting without mercy
Till I am worn out

Tear over tear…
Scar over scar…
Bleeding after bleeding...
All I can do now
is watch them
Closing right before me
my final break down
Nothing else around
Only me and those yellow
hunting eyes of secrets…

 

 

 

 

 


























 

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Only me and those eyes...hunting me in the dark...

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  • Wind Walker
    December 28, 2008
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    Well Done

    very exacting words spoken well
    good luck in the contest
    W W


  • breedluv gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    I really like this poem; I'm not really sure that it has a lot to do with the prompt "what is she thinking?"
    A good poem nevertheless.
    Russell


  • sunny day
    September 15, 2007

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    This was so wonderful, I love the picture that you put there with it. It flowed effortlessly and it had a mysterious tinge that kept me riveted with each word. Wolves are beautiful creatures and this was as lovely as they are. I wish you all the best in this contest. It sounds golden to me. You are an awesome writer of free verse. You fill it with imagery and capture your audience (me). Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 12, 2007
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    There is strong emotion in this, very nicely done.


  • Ethereal One gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    excellent

    Your words bring out the feeling of fear and how it feels to be chased unmercifully. Each line became more and more desperate. Outstanding write!

    Good luck in the contest!!

    Ethereal One


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    Hun, this is awesome. Such deep and painful emotion you have described vividly. So much of this I can relate to. You are so talented. This should bring home a Gold! Good luck in the contest sweet one.

    Jeannie


  • wattle silver member
    September 12, 2007

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    Ms Wolfy you have exposed us all in this beautiful poem. We see the eyes, we melt, and yet what is it behind the glow making them work. I've been with the same partner now for more than thirty years. You'd think I'd understand what is going on in that brain by now. I haven't got a clue; all I can do is wait and see what comes next. ----- Thank you.


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    September 12, 2007

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    Great Write twinny
    i really liked the flow of this piece.
    just a little correction near the end....brake should be break

    Tasha


  • crystallynnbradford
    September 12, 2007

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    OMG! this is awesome it so would've won the gold trophy, but don't give up hope, I'll be hosting a new contest in a few weeks.


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    September 12, 2007

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    WOW....

    love the graphic, really throws a punch before you read this!
    I see you got a lot of deep emotions flowing, wording is perfect, that continues to draw me in, and desire to see what will happen next. Thanks so much for sharing this Phenomenual piece and good luck in the contest as well.

    Always,
    Ephiphany

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