Did you hear the rain,
could you hear it with your soul.
Did it soak you to the bone,
and make you feel whole.
Did you wrap your arms around it,
breath it deep inside.
Did it make your heart beat faster,
with every longing sigh.
Did you taste the inner pleasure,
with your wanting lips.
Did it cleanse your starving soul,
refreshing all the bits.
Did you feel the tingling moment,
sending shivers down your spine.
Did it make you feel this way,
then let it rain all the time...
Author notes
5. I love walking in the rain because nobody know that i'm crying.
Timespell, Rain http://www.freefoto.com/preview/16-05-76?ffid=16-05-76
1. "Sometimes you have to create your own magic and sometimes you have to chase a raincloud if you want to dance in the rain!"
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Comments
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I did!! Thanks for reminding me.
Well written, good rhyme and flow and rhythm. Thanks for you entry. 
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Beautiful write! The only thing I didnt care for, "Did", the first stanza you used in on every line, then the second thrird and fourth stanzas, its every other line. Other than that, Its a beautiful write, Makes me miss the rain now that its gone. Great Job! Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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Very nice! i enjoyed every line of this poem!! thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!
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I can see why this one has placed so many times already. Great take on the prompt. THanks for entering and best wishes,
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Yes sometimes you do need to make your own magic within the rain. Thanks for joining in our contest
with a little magic of rain.
Warm thoughts.
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I like the way you asked how it made "me or you" feel.
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A very good piece. I noticed that you didn't use question marks. For me, that was a little distracting, but still a great poem. Thanks for sharing it in the contest.
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Very well written piece! I can feel the attachment to the rain. =] It makes me wish the sun would play hide-and-seek right about now. haha. BEST of luck in my contest.
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this is a beautiful piece. well-done.
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Congrats on the HM!
Wowzers! Wicked write you have here. I'm not usually a fan of repeating words or phrases so I eat my words when I say how well it has worked here. You have got it spot on, beat, flow, rhyme...simply wow! Good luck in the contest.
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really nice poem here, i liked the flow alot. did you mean to not put question marks with your questions? it kind of threw me off i bit, but who am i to judge? ive put "wrong quotations" all over my poetry. it's the art were going for, were not all tight wad english majors here (^_^) anyway, good poem, really enjoyed.
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great!
this was simply amazing... your lines were so beautifully penned! You wrote of the rain with so much passion and beauty! i loved it! and it just made me love rain more...
Your last stanza was excellent! i like it so much! Thanks for this entry... and best of luck in my contest!
much love always,
Ranji
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It's rather rare to find a poem about rain that isn't actually sad or depressing I really like the fact that you managed to take this overused topic and give a big twist to it very well done on that!
Keep it up,
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That was really smooth and great. Only thing I didn't like was the mix up of your and you're at theslart. It kind of interrupted the flow in my mind. Sorry - I'm picky...
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Thank you Nikki
Thank you Nikki, Me and my grammar sometimes are not on the same wave length! Thanks for reading and for your comment.
All the best,
~T.S~
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Your poem would make it rain forever it was so good!
WOW! How did you know I did that stuff in the rain? NO for real.... all those questions you ask relate to my real life and things Ive done in the pooring rain. I totally love the rain so much and I really do wish It would rain all the time. You know your poem up there made me think of what you meant when you said "The Rain Did" and now that I have read all of the poem I think I finally get it. I think you meant to be like "Hey all those things you felt in the rain... well the rain was feeling it as well" or something like that.... right(or wrong)???? Well that was a great poem and it really 'hit home' with me. Man I liked it so much I wana read it again.OH and just to let you know I think there is a type-O in ur poem... see where it says " Did you wrap you're harms around it," there is an h in front of arms and to my knowledge you do not spell arms with an H.... though I might be wrong. Just wanted to let you know. BUT no matter the spelling of your words I truely loved your poem. I even read it a second time while writing this comment!!!
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Thanks Circet
I really appreciated that you actually looked beyond the poem itself and grasped the greater meaning. "Hey how many times have you wished it rained? We are water children, without it we die.
I love the rain, best times are in the old forests, when the rain trickles down their Barks. Each tree giving of it's own fragrance mixed with rain. Thanks for spotting the Typo, I never see myself.
Thanks again for taking time to read and for leaving a great comment!
All the best
~T.S~
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mmmmmmm the imagery within this one is so pure
sometimes a little rain can clean the soul,
sometimes I wish I could simply dance in the rain forever,
Thanks for sharing,
Warm thoughts
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Thanks
Yes I love the rain especially on a hot summers day.
It cleanses the earth and brings freshness to your senses.
Thanks for reading and for your nice comment.
All the best
~T.S~
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nice rhythm to this piece, i love the rain as well good luck in the contest
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Thanks for reading and for your comment.
~T.S~
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Interesting poem, good rhyming and it had great expression about the theme. The only thing I would change would be a couple spelling errors. Good job, and thank you for entering!
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Thanks Tigress
for your nice comment, Sorry my grammar is a bit wobbly.
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i love this. Its so great.
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Thank you
Thank you, glad you like it.
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I love the rain and this piece really brought out the wonderful thoughts that can come along with the rain.
I really enjoyed this..Great penning.
Soulful Woman
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Thank you,
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