Pumpkin pie air, gingerbread land,
stitch of birds on a line
Ducks, falling like rain on a crowded lake,
geese folding up the sky
Corn husk rattle and squirrel’s brown prattle,
mole harvest tunnels to underbrush den
Leafy last hurrahs and weedy rustle
sound of loon on his leaving
Warmth in a green apple kitchen,
steam window covering goodbye.
Author notes
jpg, A Painting A Day, artist Jan Blencowe
In a list
A contest entry
- Free Fall by Peteskid.
700 points, ended September 12, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Okay. Turn around and check the roast in the oven. Cause the tramp stole the pie off the window sill.
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beautiful, Carol! Congrats on this golden slice.
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thank you ea, and welcome back. It is good to see you again.
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This is a beautiful piece. Great phrasing -- each line flows very well, and your imagery is strong & colourful. I love the idea of the 'geese folding up the sky'.
Congrats on winning gold.
DancingRed.
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It is fall here for sure...we went from unbearable humidity and heat for two days to, now, down to 45 this morning. Fall is such a beautiful season, although I regret summer's leaving, the colors scents and sounds of autumn are beautiful.
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Wonderful, sights, smells, tastes; colors birds and animals so many are the events and sights of autumn. Wonderful use of imagery in free verse with a remarkable brevity yet so many views and ideas. excellent. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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ty pk,
thank you for reminding me to love autumn and why.
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The fullness of summer is taken apart and each color served in its own special tart and your poem explored many fo the flavors passed our way. Thanks for the joy.
Love, Tom B.
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I am craving pumpkin pie..... and no fresh pumpkin..must hit the garden stands. Ty for your comment, tomis
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I love Autumn and I love how you captured it in a wonderful poem with perfect rhythm! Good luck in your contest!
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ty, Elisabeth. Pie anyone?
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Autumn is a beautiful season. Your alliteration and imagery brought the smells, colors and activities of this grand time of year to me...
"Corn husk rattle and squirrel’s brown prattle,
mole harvest tunnels to underbrush den
Leafy last hurrahs and weedy rustle
sound of loon on his leaving"
Seasonal Sensation, Scribe! ~ Nicholas
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You ahve your home puter fixed? Must be driving you roudn duh bend. Thank you for your comments and hope pumpkin pie finds your place.
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Perfect and serene picture you've painted here.
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ty, rowan, are you getting frost liek Calgary area yet?
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