Incarceration of memories; Its a dungeon-
in the basement of a forlorn yearning
An abyss of maddening wait haunts…
Bordering my consciousness
An attack laid ready to spring upon my dreams…
Dreams that haunt, dreams that allure
Dreams that drive me insane, crazy!
Dreams of a yearning to be filled inhumane, un-named..
Or perhaps it was the most human of things
This strange craving to scrape, peel and take…?
A ghoulish want is asking revenge of me
Beloved, yet fatal- this calling.. can't allow me to succumb!
"I had to do it, don't you see!!?"
But these screams from my dungeon keep haunting me,
hunting me, "They'll get me! They'll get me soon!", I fear
Unless.. I give in, and let her destroy the sentry within.....
Author notes
Prompt for this one- "Edgar Allan Poe"
Dont know where this came from.. I'm only aware of 'The Fall Of the House Of Usher' and 'The tell tale heart'..(both of which was worth truly indulging in..) and how his work has inspired Stephen King..
This is my infantile attempt to evoke somewhat similar feelings and an atmosphere that I felt at some point during the 'Poe' experience..
And Thank you dear Roxy for pointing out the repetition.. it would not look the same other wise
Hoping it makes an enjoyable read.. Pls try reading it in a Vincent Pricey way .. more fun that way~~~
A contest entry
- "Edgar Allan Poe" by Virgoan.
300 points, ended October 4, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The way you softly spoke haunting tones within words makes the readers wait and want. This is like reading in the dark mind of ones soul.
Well crafted fellow poet.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck. Keep writing
VIRGOAN
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*Yay!*
Thank you dear 'Virgoan' 
This gold is special.. not only because its my first but cause I'm least critical of this write 
Thank you for this very interesting contest and for your encouragement.. thank you.
Kunjal.
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Oh my, this is very similar (in subject) with something I wrote sometime ago, which I'm not sure where is now...
Mind is a powerful thing and might take us down very easily. The small caves in our mind hides very sticky webs, quite dangerous to our sanity - again sanity, what we have today?!
Excellent poem Kunj!
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Hmm Mari.. last time it was 'yearning'.. today (tonight over here.. with morning approaching very quickly..) it is 'insanity'.. some telepathic thing is going on in here lol.. You must chk out the Vincent Price narration of Edgar Poe's Tell Tale Heart.. mind blowing.. wait a second.. will msg you the youtube links...
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I love Edgar Allan Poe!! When I read your poem even before I read the author notes it made me feel like I was reading his poems!! You did a great job!! Keep up the good work adn feel free to check out my page anytime~!!
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Wow!! Thank you dear 'teenangel92' I will. Keep reading, Keep writing
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beautiful horror
i think the sentry within is mind blowing.. good
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..the poor squished 'ego'.. doesn't seem to stand a chance here.. the id and the conscience seem to be ruling this tug of war (forever on going)
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amazing
I wish that I could put together a piece like this. I enjoyed this very much.I loved the first lines. Memories are like loaded spring traps ready to go off at the slightest vibration of thought. beautiful. I appreciate your comment and thanks for sharing.
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Pleasure has been mine..thank YOU for the reads
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Ms Me, Ms Rox is correct. Your dark moods produce wonderful results. It's 'funny' how poets need to feel pain in order to spread joy. It's as if good poets are born with a nail in their viens to twist for better results. ---- I'm thinking your nail must be extra large. It works well. -- Thank you
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I dont know lol, its just that the way it was narrated -'The tell tale heart' the one narrated by Mr. Vincent Price.. it was so much fun and inspiring.. he was enjoying it somewhere and reveling in the fear more than pain.. come to think of it, Goodness! I guess I do relate to that! But all thanks go to this contest no direct personal dark moods can get credit for this one.. Was more joyous actually.. hmm maybe I've gone bonkers..
(Thank u, you're the best!)
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I really like your 'darker' writes. I think it shows that as a poet and a person you are not a 'one way street'. In this section:
Incarceration of memories; Its a dungeon-
in the basement of a forlorn yearning
An abyss of maddening wait haunts…
Bordering my consciousness
An attack laid in wait before all my dreams…
Im not sure if I like how you used the word 'wait' twice not far apart from each other. Its not bad, but it might benefit from changing one of them to something else? Just a little note.
I loved the rest of the piece though. I agree about the haunting and hunting... Very clever! Thank you, as always, for the wonderful read.
Kia kaha,
Rox
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Hey Rox Thanks so much! I'm v happy you liked it And thanx even more for your suggestion.. you're right.. have edited the 'wait' as well as the last line... I feel it reads better than before now. Thank U
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wow... i love the way u've used the Screams from the Dungeon and the thought of Dungeon itself... gives me a feeling of where and how deep these memories are coming from... great write..
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Thanx Hitesh.. doubly- for taking out time and leaving me your kind words. I'm glad you liked it.
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While reading this I felt very confused, but I guess that is just part of this poem. Kind of like being trapped between words. I really like the last stanza and how you play with the words going from haunting to hunting. That's very smart! Good job!
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Thank you dear Snow White Queen
'Kind of like being trapped between words' ..and worlds Thanx again
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