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A Whispered Kiss of Illusions

 

 

 

I~l~l~u~s~i~o~n~s haunt my whispered kiss

so easily        in a dream

               lost

your   p a g e s   turn slowly in endless  sin

a dimensionless spectrum of    aphrodisiac    memories

that I find I cannot sustain alone…

 

Our romance, once soulful  innocence

is now bound in   r-u-s-t-e-d   c-h-a-i-n-s,  sensual sensations

smeared with our  KISS sown into delirious minds…

 

The inevitable   u nra ve ling   of 'us'      as footprints of an endless lie

trample all hopes with a last goodbye;

now an empty quill which dr          in melancholy

                                                  i

                                                   p

                                                     s

drowning in words that will not rise…

 

L~ace, which held so much promise, torn from our souls

hearts shredded with   v.e.n.o.m.o.u.s   lullabys

numbed vacant arms

blind to the pleasant memories of what was really

such a     f  ra gil e     relationship

 

now    bro      en      into countless pieces strewn among satin sheets,

 

                      k

 

light afraid of the dark, sleep afraid to awaken…

 

 

Two aching souls, fallen, famished

unhappy end where both savor the love that now tastes like

 

TwiSted Tears   tumbling

from a forgotten fairytale

slipping uncontrollably into a   nightmare

which can only be washed away

                    in torrid   r~iv~ers    of deception...

 

It is my nature to fight against this-    for I will be yours   f o r e v e r

sending my kisses shivering along your spine

as tender deep    -gasps-    of surrendered temptation

`r`ai`n`  from the sky in sheets of passion

so forbidden between our eyes just moments ago,

and we find ourselves  new again.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Woven from the following poems of

 Scarlet Ambrosia:

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Kissed to Oblivion 

CrimsonSea of my Melancholic Fairytale 

Lunatic Cafe  

Innocent Romance  

Eternally Broken  

End of Time  

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  • You've got quite an interesting font there! I like it! I also love this poem. It's different than most dirty pretty poems. Much easier to look at. You've got some HONEST emotion in here. And that's really hard to do. Very well done on this.


    • wbiro gold member
      May 10
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      thanks, and yes, writing like this WOULD drive you crazy! lol an unexpectedly difficult aspect is to not overdo the highlighted text... and some describe dirty pretty and the subject matter; very interesting to note the Urban Dictionary's definition of dirty pretty:


      Dirty-Pretty
      (also "dirrty-pretty")

      "Dirty-pretty" is a diverse and nonspecific term used frequently when referring to a particular style of poetry, prose, lyrics, or music. The origins of the phrase are, to my knowledge, traced back to AllPoetry.com but that is completely up for debate.

      ~Dirty pretty is~

      According to Diseased Mind: "something gorgeous and cancer filled. broken hearts and hipbones. stars and razor-blade wrists. eating disorders, Vogue, ugly, and glittered"

      Dirty pretty is...modified scene kids, being pretty in a fucked up kind of way, walking the streets, addiction, glitter, glamor, Hollywood Blvd., toxicity, pixie dust, acid soaked anything, cyanide nightmares, &&, excessive periods, obsession, sex, lies, lipgloss, cheap perfume, makeup, plastic, romance, whores, neon lights, fake, gorgeous, bleeding speakers, shattered glass, cavities, eating disorders, bruises, makesbelieve, insecurity, breakdowns, shot gun, hip bones, collar bones, &&all things m e l o d r a m a t i c.


      "~ f r a g i l e (commenting on poetry): Love it.
      So many parts,
      This is just
      dirty-pretty being shoved down your throat and
      being laughed at behind your back.
      ~ You're such a whore, but you're so dirty-pretty, I still love you."


      and noting it's origins are from allpoetry brings to light how important to poetry people writing here just may be, without even suspecting it, even those just passing through...

      so perhaps this isn't dirty pretty at all (though dirty-pretty types have often written in this style), perhaps this is just where I would fit into that world... (I think I'll have to do a column on it all, for I can see how dirty-pretty can be quite deep)...

      and since you gave it gold I'm going to go over it with a new critical eye, to make sure it will stand up to scrutiny and justify your decision...



  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    October 3, 2007

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    Great write!
    I loved the sophisticatedness of the dp here... Must've taken you a while to do all the editing and stuff, but worth it!
    Enjoyed the read


    • wbiro gold member
      October 3, 2007
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      thanks, always nice to create a new branch within a genre...!


  • Dead Star--x
    September 20, 2007

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    very sophisticated, non-cleche dirty pretty and just beautifully poetic
    youre a finalists thanx for entering & good luck
    CureMyTragedy


  • Scarlet Ambrosia
    September 12, 2007
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    ohh...

    i locw this one!!!

  • tara wilson gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    I really like this, it's creative, and very sophisticated dirty pretty, yes, that is a good name for it!
    "I fight against it- for I am yours forever
    I send my kiss shivering along your tantalizing spine
    tender deep gasps of surrendered temptation
    r`ai`n from the sky in sheets of amassed passion
    forbidden in the eyes just a moment ago
    and we are new again." ~ Beautiful



    • wbiro gold member
      September 12, 2007
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      hey thanks, and do you know what I just noticed? I can't write in a whispering voice to save my life! ( but I'll settle for a deep, softly-rumbling voice anyday... )


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 12, 2007
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    oh this is so sadly written,but picks up at the end, good luck in this contest,mm

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