this is more than an itch –
the scratch of luck
couldn’t penetrate deeply
as the ointment of passion
could only heal its sore,
this is more than hunger –
fruits of greatness
couldn’t satisfy the soul
as the butter of creativity
could only calm its craving,
this is the Scorpio’s Sting –
scorns and praises
couldn’t affect its potency
as the eye of excellence
is this venom’s sole target,
and I am the Scorpio –
secluded
in my creative veins
is stubbornness
with passionate blood.
Author notes
#6...I'm a typical Scorpio
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A contest entry
- Scorpio (Contest) by Sedasia.
600 points, ended September 15, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Excellent!
I love the imagery and the tone of this poem - you have written a very sophisticated yet interesting description of Scorpio. I especially love the ending where it says "secluded/in my creative veins/is stubborness/with passionate". There isn't really anything to criticise on this piece, however I would have liked captal letters in the beginning of each line. Great poem and good luck in my first contest! -
Great use of the option here! I love it. The rhytm was grand and go use of vocab too. My favorite lines were of the last stanza.
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powerful.
Very nice entry. Thank you for entering. Good luck.
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