[My mom always told me not to talk to strangers,
but she never told me i couldn't fall for one.]
We met through friends, shook hands
& tiny chats grew to conversations
to walks through the deep, dark night
ever since you walked into my life,
i can't sleep in my bed the same
it doesn't feel as right as when i'm lying with you.
Any guy can walk beside me,
but nobody fills the spot better than you.
& when my hands feel weak & disabled,
your hands are the only ones I want to hold.
[in the corners of my eyes,
i feel love residing
but, I can't breathe too soon.]
I don't want you to run away like everyone else
but, I know you can't promise that.
I know I'm young,
but my dreams can be turned into
full-length, Broadway musicals
& yeah, yeah:
I know I should probably stopppp.
[I kinda sorta can't help it, baby]
D
A
R
L
I
N
G,
[You stole the slide shows of my nightmares
& cranked up the volume on my fairy tales.]
Author notes
yeap.
I'm a hopeless romantic.
I should probably stop.
It just gets me in trouble.
Leaves Eyes - Leaves Eyes
Moonlight you keep me safe at night
And I know you're here if I fall
Starlight show me the way in the dark
And I know you're here when I call
[option 1.]
A contest entry
- Chorus Romance Says Goodnight, and other songs. (More Points to Come) by abba12.
600 points, ended October 2, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Know What Its Like To Feel?[♥] by WishMeAway--x.
700 points, ended September 12, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 4 topics to choose from. by Blondita.
1100 points, ended October 8, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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well done, an interesting take on the prompt. i enjoyed reading it. I really like the first 5 lines . good work
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Nothing wrong with being a hopeless romantic, as long as you have an equal measure of cynisism tucked away for use when necessary . I am presuming you are quite young, and on that basis, I'll say I rather like this. I think it could be tweaked slightly here and there, for greater impact, but overall it's good. Left me with a smile anyway :-) Thanks for entering.
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beautiful
even if you are a hopeless romantic this poem is totally sweet and i love it it has great imagery it was like a story being played in my head it is so awesome i love it y favorite lines were:
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I know I'm young,
but my dreams can be turned into
full-length, Broadway musicals
& yeah, yeah:
I know I should probably stopppp.
[I kinda sorta can't help it, baby]
D
A
R
L
I
N
G,
[You stole the slide shows of my nightmares
& cranked up the volume on my fairy tales.]'
beautifully written darling -
omigosh.. awesome bby.
So so beautiful.
Congrats on gold && good luck in the other contest
have i ever told you ily?
i thinks i might of.
Eek.
Marry me x]
♥
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Ah, this is beautiful. Those last two lines are magnificent; so powerful, so real...
Congrats on a well-deserved gold trophy.
DancingRed. -
very nice
That was so sweet.....To me, it had an innocent tone to it along with deep and spontanious meaning. best of luck in the contest!
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this is exactly what i wanted.
finalist babe.
oh yeah, that song by leaves eyes is one of my favorites.
♥PrettyLady -
oh don't i know this feeling I'll be lost without my fella I believe we are all promised sombody to go throuh life with I have found my someone special normaly it takes a life time to get to know some body he is my soul mate my best freind be lost without him, excellent poem good luck
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oh, I'm the same way.
this is just amazing. and cute darling.
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