There was a young girl from a suburb
who ended the night by her curb
if she didn't get up by five or sixish
might've been mistaken for rubbish
Not before meeting the man she'd marry
a nightmare, when she stopped to pea
down Ocean Parkway this all would begin
not far from the infamous Oak Beach Inn
30 years later amazed they're together
but even more curious to see whether
after Danna reads this says it stinks
or in the spirit of it, orders a drink
A contest entry
- The Bar Scene (Adult) by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended September 25, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is cute and looks to be quite intersting.
nice going in this contest as it looks she took it with a grain of salt, or was it sugar.
Riftkin -
Nice job with this one also. Nice little write.
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Hmmmmmmmmm, methinks you know a little more about Danna then others do, there seems to be a sharp ring of truth in these words.
best of luck to you...Scott
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LMAO, oh, how did you know?
Oh, this was a delicious little rhyme. Thank you for making me laugh so hard. Loved it.
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