Earth is a blessing bound to a Star
water blue world, a gem so rare.
A sapphire among jewels strung afar
across the whirling well of the Sun.
Water blue world, a gem so rare
following a path with miracle of life,
across the whirling well of the Sun.
A beacon in the cold and dark of space
following a path with miracle of life
while wind and rains circle its breadth.
A beacon in the cold and dark of space
and lands rise up to touch cloud laden skies
while wind and rains circle its breadth
teeming life flowers over its ages
and lands rise up to touch cloud laden skies
striving all to know the time of wonder
Teeming life flowers over its ages,
a sapphire among jewels strung afar;
striving all to know the time of wonder
Earth is a blessing bound to a Star
Author notes
Unrhymed Pantoum
In a list
A contest entry
- The Big 5-0.... (50th Contest, that is!) by Barbara.
850 points, ended September 30, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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the poem is beautiful
the feelings it inspire
is one of awe and breath taking
Riftkin -
you picked the complex option, yet it reads like a fire-side story, very conversational
with a beautiful rooted language
enjoyed, thanks!
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Very well done! As it has been said before, your imagery is wonderful and fills the mind with beautiful scenery! The way the piece is woven together is masterful. Very well done.
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Since the contest is anonymous, I can't see who you are... but..
I have altered the contest slightly and added another form. Just wanted you to know to make it fair to all who enter.
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This is a beautiful entry, full of wonderful imagery and great lines. Nice job in combining the elements together.
Although... you have line four repeated in the twenty spot, instead of line one repeated there.
"teeming life flowers over its ages" .. a nice line... I like it.
Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest
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What a wonderful form for this one, ...it flows beautifully; very striking.
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Peteskid right now