Such a hideous sight
it's always the same.
Always put up a fight
shake your head in shame.
This creature's quite strange.
It's habits; shocking.
So obviously deranged
continue mocking.
It's really the same old.
You chase away all.
There's no room in your mold
for ideas to fall.
Author notes
~Whitemaiden
http://i19.tinypic.com/625mvie.jpg
At first appearance to some that picture might seem strange, and to some hideous. Without so much as given a deeper look to many are ready to dismiss what lays in front of them, because they don't understand what they're looking at. That's my inspiration.
Uh you just picked the picture at random?
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Round 7 by Frodofan.
1670 points, ended September 19, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The Old Same Old by Whitemaiden
Title - 7
Style - 7
Form - 6
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 6
Originality - 6
Reaction - 6
Rules - 10
Makes sense - 7
Enjoyable - 6
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New Old Same Old by Whitemaiden
Title - 8
Style - 7
Form - 7
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 8
Originality - 9
Reaction - 7
Rules - 10*
Makes sense - 10
Enjoyable - 7
total: 83
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Well of course I picked it at random. lol. I had that on my computer because someone had e-mailed it to me though.
If you worked in something from another contestant's poem please let me know.
This was okay. I think you're capable of far better though. It seems slightly exaggerated. But I like the play on the phrase for your title.
Title - 7
Style - 7
Form - 7
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 8
Originality - 9
Reaction - 6
Rules - 10*
Makes sense - 10
Enjoyable - 6
total: 80
Remember, if the scoring goes bad for you, you still have that pass ticket!
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Interesting...
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