She looked with eyes the color of sadness
And said. “The sky looks angry.”
Her face pressed against the splotched car window
AS we zoomed down a familiar road to a familiar place
I looked up at them for a moment:
And indeed the sky did look angry
Some of the clouds dark, others flushed red by the
Setting sun, as if in minutes they would open up
And pour,
Blood
Down upon our little car
That was like so many other little cars
“Why is it angry?” she asked her voice seeming
Loud in the small confines of the car
It seemed to reverberate from the front to the back
Bouncing back off of seats and windows only to echo
In my ears as my pitiful answer was ushered forth
Like a unwilling bride down the aisle
“I don’t know.” was all I said
My lips barely moving, as if I had no strength
To come up with something..
Something besides
I
Don’t
Know
She sighed a child’s sigh, the gentle exhale of air
That for some meant the start of a tantrum but for
Her just an acknowledgement that my answer was indeed
Unsatisfactory
It stung in the way, the knowledge that I couldn’t answer
Anger was one emotion that I’ve fell upon many times
My reliable slightly suicidal partner in all my battles
The thing that lead us to grimace slightly with displeasure
And kill our fellow man,
I
Wondered…
Did she know what anger was? As if reading my mind
She spoke so clearly it left me awestruck and dumb
“anger doesn’t solve anything.”
How she hit the nail on the head
So perfectly her small voice
Again filling the space till I thought the windows
Would break and her words would usher out into
The vast realm of the world, leaving it mute in her wake
If Only
Her
Voice was strong enough, with a sigh our journey came to end
Under the red sky and angry clouds…
Pondering I turned the engine off and wondered what all
I
Don’t
Know…
Author notes
Doesn't it mom, it looks so very angry...
http://unheardwisdom.deviantart.com/art/The-Sky-Looks-Angry-2-64746972
A contest entry
- The endless contest (or longest contest is more like it)! by Ted E Bare.
450 points, ended April 30, 2008, 98 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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As i clicked on the link; perhaps the sky was angry I thought to myself. Then again, maybe it was trying to send a message other than anger. It cold be that the sky was confused and felt misplaced. Or even misunderstood as it was taking on moods on a human level. Ok, enough of my observations of the picture. Thought your poem was truly powerful as it told a great story. It always seem that children speak their minds as they appear to have honesty at the highest degree whil at a young age. Always wanting to know how things are done and why. I felt like I was there in the car while the conversation and set of emotions were being displayd. I want to thank you for entering my "The endless contest (or longest contest is more like it)!" contest. This will not be the last time I read your entry. At the minimum, it will be read at least once more during judging.
Ted E
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She looked with eyes the color of sadness
And said. “The sky looks angry.”
I dont think Ive ever lookedat the sky and thought angry. however i think i may just star doing that now.
Great write there. love the piece. keep it up.
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thanks for reading
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Loved it!
And indeed the sky did look angry
Some of the clouds dark, others flushed red by the
Setting sun, as if in minutes they would open up
And pour,
Blood
Down upon our little car
I really liked the tone of this piece, the way certain parts such as above just seem to fit- the subject matter is also moving-out of the mouths of babes and all that-a glimpse into a real life moment of poetry. Great.
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Thanks for reading, glad you liked
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Touching
Makes me want to have a little girl =(. I'm only 14, but I've lived long enough to know that the older you are, the less you really know...at least about the stuff that's important. Adults may have intellect and knowledge, but children has wisdom. And I believe God (or whoever you think is out there) speaks through them.
As for the poem, though not very traditional in form, it's very poetical and stimulating =). My favorite part was when you started talking about the echoes of her words...I've always thought that great truths ring in your ears for days at a time, wouldn't you agree? Reflective and personal, it's something I can easily relate to. Three happy faces for the talented writer.
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Thanks for reading.
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That was... well, nice isn't quite the right word, but I enjoyed reading it. I really liked the lines "as my pitiful answer was ushered forth / Like a unwilling bride down the aisle".... The way you sort of started off with one thing – anger – and then went into 'I don't know' was smooth... I liked it. They're both hard topics (imo, at least) and the sky and the little girl were an interesting metaphor. Good write!
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Thanks for reading ^_^
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